A very nice story. You really have the knack for the 1st person POV. The descriptions of the emotions and thoughts of Orkath and Chris as they both had their internal conflicts and cherished moments were detailed and spot on. For a first story it had a very very good start (better than my first story, I'll tell you that. I practically hated my first 9 chapters after reading the entire thing a week after i finished it. But chapter 10 onwards were better, but that is enough of me ranting about my first story) You gave both main characters plenty of personality and color. They both made a wonderful pair.
Now i wonder if Orkath with the morphing ability will use the Frolis maneuver when the war is done. Then he will live happily as a human with both Chris and Eric growing up with them even though is is older than both of them. I mean come on that has to happen and anything less will be cruel to Orkath and Chris. Maybe he will use the DNA of both Chris and Eric to make his own human morph instead of other people's and become a nothlit free from the need of Kandrona.
You do know there's a way to italicize words, right? You don't have to go all /like this/ with your readers. «I commend you for using these markers, though!»
Overall, I rather liked the little snippets this chapter was made up of. It's so nice to see this story be updated after so long!
I read this chapter a long time ago but I keep coming back to it because I honestly don't understand Orkath's position. He's annoyed that the Governor does not speak of Yeerk honor when the Yeerks are invading Earth without even having the decency to inform anyone about it and infesting anyone who might find out. They infest children to get to their parents and target the lonely and vulnerable to turn them into slaves. They steal people's bodies and act like they are entitled to them because their lack of a body somehow makes them better than people born with bodies. They behave as though the person whose body they stole simply no longer exists - but it's really not THAT bad for the host - and do their best to use their host's friends' and family's affection for them to trap them in the same fate. They even make it a more serious offense to have sympathy with a host than to aid Andalites or outright treason! They lock people in cages like animals whenever they aren't thrilled with having their bodies stolen. I just...what is he talking about with regards to honor? Is he really confusing being good at fighting and fighting despite the fact that they could die (though apparently not against impossible odds because that is stupid and human) with honor? And when he's wondering what happened to the basic respect that one party shows another during war...what about the basic respect their whole species either fails to show or are forced to hide from their hosts? And I have no idea what kind of account he got of Elfangor's death because he couldn't have been there and thought that Visser Three taunting Elfangor about enslaving the Andalite home world, putting his trusted people in Elfangor's families heads and anticipating their screams, and enslaving the humans and the way that he made Elfangor's death a public spectacle to laugh at before having his near-death foe held down and then be literally *eaten* was in any way allowing Elfangor to die "with a sense of accomplishment, a sense of righteousness." And even when he acknowledges Elfangor took out seven or eight bug fighters it was apparently more than that. I know that I'm never going to *agree* with Orkath about the Yeerks as a whole having honor (though individuals can) but I honestly don't know what kind of honor he thinks they have. As Visser Three said early on, even when they make promises to gain hosts they never intend to keep them from the onset. It must not be nice to have the governor talk about how terrible they are but I just don't see what kind of honor Orkath thinks they have. Especially considering that he is at that very moment plotting to use the feelings of a boy who his host has a mutual attraction to to enslave him and ruin his life!
Oh my gosh, I'm not 100% sure, but I swear Orkath just said I love you! Sorry I haven't put up a review but I usually review after finishing a story unless something big hits me. I actually shed tears when I saw that. Orkath is in the closet! _ I probably would end up being a willing controller trying to talk my Yeerk into turning to the good side. Also, having a Yeerk in my head would probably greatly improve my D&D skills. So much pluses with a Yeerk for me, I'd probably forget the entirety that Yeerks are inherently evil though SOME are good. I would SO keep oatmeal just for my Yeerk. Though, knowing my luck, I'd probably end up getting a high-rank Yeerk. :( Great story thus far. _ I don't know when I'll be back to comment again, but two things are certain, this story is awesome and I'm onto the next chapter.
I had honestly given this up as deadfic. Despite previously erratic update schedules, almost a year with no updates is, well, a long time. So I was very pleasantly surprised to do my weekly (ish) check of Animorphs fics and find that this had updated.
I really liked this chapter. Purely on a technical level, it's a lot better than the last one, and I appreciated the brief Taxxon POV drabble. I've never seen anything written from the point of view of one of those unfortunate aliens, ever. And of course, I appreciated the brief cameo by Urbosh. I think you got his voice right.
Another great chapter. Rarely do we see Yeerk-to-Yeerk contact without human emotions clouding it - that scene in the pool with the Visser and the others getting the morphing power was just that. And, of course, the inexplicable host/controller connection, where they /almost/ seem to want to pity us, but don't quite make it there. Very nice work, again!
Let me be 100% honest, here - I've sort of been avoiding this fic, simply because slash fics have never been of interest to me. After a recent run-in with an /extremely/ talented writer and his slash, I decided to give yours a try. Boy, am I glad I did. The /only/ critisism I might have after chapter 1 is that it could be considered a little heavy on the sexual content, but then again, there was fair warning in the summary. Not to mention, for the sake of realism, of /course/ the internal dialogue between a controller and Yeerk would not have any filters on it. ...I like it. It's realistic as all hell. Best 'controller' fic I've read, and this is just the first chapter! I appreciate the fantastic writing style, and the dialogue is superb. Even if the content isn't my cup of tea, I look at it like this - the controller/controled interaction isn't a pleasant one in the first place. It's almost artful the way you have the Yeerk torturing this boy. I'd imagine growing up gay would be hard enough.../this/ is almost too much. Excellent work, my friend. I can't reiterate how glad I am that I started reading your work, and I'll be sure to let you know how I feel about the rest of it in the future. Matter of fact, I could use a mind like yours to help me add that dose of realism to my own fics...but that's not the point, lol. Great, fantastic work! Super A, guy!
This story is plain amazing. Even though I've never gotten through the entire series and such, I'm able to keep up with what happens and everything. And ohgod, the Yeerks. They creep me the dang out, but it really does put things in perspective. And I freaking love it, yeah!
... I know I'm gonna be watching out for an update. Hoping to see one soon!
This chapter needs some grammar clean up, although that may be a case of the pot calling the kettle black. Also, it's nice to see this story update. I still love it.
Although I would like to add that I don't think that Chrisc is in love with Chris. Their bond always struck me as more of a friendship. Well, at least to Chris. Maybe he'll have to give his Yeerk a "we're just friends" speech. That would be fun to see.
DH L'Orange 2/4/11 . chapter 27
okay, the last sentence of this chapter had me grinning :D
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