Hey CV! Great to see you're writing again. Good chapter... I may have to go back and read the others again!

There you are! I was beginning to think we'd all be left hanging forever! Yes, school's always after in its later years. (I'm a sophmore.)

Nice work on the series so far...do Abigail and Chris know that the other exists and is she for real?

By the last update's date I'm guessing school is difficult? And I'm betting there's a curse at work here.

I hope you update this story soon. Its as good as the first!

Wow! You're an amazing author! I'm adding this story to "Favorites" and "Story Alert," and then I'm going to go read some more of your work!

please up date!
please please please!!

Is "sugoi" just a term of respect, or does it mean something else? Sorry about real life...hope it gets better CV! Love!

Ooh, very nice! I'm so happy to see that you're still working on this. It's just as good as "Tribute". Sorry to sound anal retentive, but I spotted this little typo:

Abigail paused, frowning slightly as she thought. “We-ell…yes. Visions—of sally, not always in the Hotel..."

The "sally" isn't capitalized. Once again, sorry if it comes off as me just being annoying or nit picky. I know that I always appreciate it when someone catches my little mistakes so I can fix them. One thing I do love about this site is that you can go back and edit things. :)

Hmm...now I'm starting to wonder if Abagail is going to be like she was in the movie, or if you're doing a new take on her.

I know you're super busy, but if you get the chance, please check out my Haunted Mansion book, "Destiny at the Haunted Mansion." I've been working on it for nearly four years and finally worked up the courage to post the first 27 chapters. (It's isn't finished yet. Although I'm still plot tweaking, the story itself has been planned out. It's a little more than half way finished.) I'd love to hear your feedback. It's more well written and more detailed and involves more twists than any other story I've worked on. I do realize how busy you are and I completely understand if you can't get to it. It's just a "if you can get the chance/have the time" sort of thing. :)
Keep writing!
PS--The second SLG Haunted Mansion comic came out on Jan. 18. It was just as fun as the first.

Hey CV! Oh, well...no more reader review responses :(. But anyway, great chapter! We really don't know whether Abigail is the sweet grandmother or not, do we? What are her motives? Hm...well, perhaps she really does just want to remember...
Oh, and Shinji is now smart and observant as well as cute...nice!

Soo...I see that you don't crave Teen Titans, like I do...

Thought I might commet properly on this chapter.

Salem made a choking noise. “You’re in historic haunted Hollywood, investigating a decades-old disappearance, and you’re using GOOGLE?”
Sabrina raised an eyebrow. “Why not? Do YOU have a better idea?”
The cat grumbled incoherently for a moment, before sulkily settling back down. “...No,” he mumbled.

/\ That line made me laugh. Of course, I'd do the same thing if I was a spirt detective (which is VERY ulikely, seeing as I'd be scared to death if I had to do the job. Unless I had my best friends as companions).

I think I've heard the Boston Citizen in the Sabrina series somewhere. Just thought I'd point it out.

One more thing, have you ever read (or seen) A Series of Unfortunate Events?

This is quite good still. I haven't watched Tower of Terror in years, although I watched the begining a couple of days ago. Good chapter.

Yay! Another chapter, and such a good one! Aww, Shinji is so cute! Although he is quite a rascal...stealing original documents? I wonder if he ever returns them...oh, well! Anyway, I await the next chapter - make it creepy for Halloween CV! Laters!

Very nice, Ama. The normal nitpicking is getting boring, so this time, I've come up with some new ways to make thousands of tiny, insignificant jabs at your work! :D

Okay, here's a little thing you should work on: shorter sentences. Not every sentence in a descriptive or event-relating paragraph has to be more than five words. Like in the paragraph "Dinner last night". Second sentence, you've used one too many semicolons. Break it up. Appreciate the tekka-maki ref, though. : )

Description of Sabrina to Shinji's appraising eye is still a bit too mushy. Practical, practical, practical! I think that, in part, it's the "adorable" thing.

"small, Shirley Temple-like girl" --> "small girl not so unlike Shirley Temple" or some such.

"whimpered, as his head smarted from the blow." --> "whimpered, his head smarting." "tender spot on his head" --> "tender spot between his ears".

"REAL WORLD." --> "real world."

WORDS THAT SHINJI SHOULD NOT KNOW: venue, prestigious, Shakespearean (he would know the person, but not that adjective), certainly