I like the middle, written in italic, very much, and the dialogue is ok too. I would've appreciated if you had written something more about their thoughts in the dialogues. It's too... short! I have to say that you've improved since you wrote this...

Oh poor Remus, I feel sorry for him... but good story.

Aw!

"sniffle* :*(

*gasp* Another good fanfic, how dare you! urgh. I feel sick...I might even throw up! *kidding* This again was a really amazing fic, it's a close second to 'First Kiss'

*chants* WRITE! WRITE! WRITE! WRITE! *continues to chant that*

Loved it so muchh...it was beautiful...the imagery was so vivid as you described the girl watching the full moon...and the last part is so sad! :sob: I feel so bad for Remus! But I can also understand how the girl feels about the full moon...Wow, I am simply awed.

Jenn

Lovely!

Whoa. Brilliant, brilliant, brilliant work! This is so emotional and heart-breaking! I love it so much! I love the way it started-“Do you remember before you were bitten, Remus?”-something about it seems very foreboding yet beautiful, and it draws you into the story right away. Using strict dialogue instead of using "he said" or "she said" is very effective in this kind of story. It makes me really imagine...

The description in this story was truly wonderful. The way you described the moon amazing and extremly detailed. Here's my favorite line on it: "When she turns, she sees a glorious sunset behind the mountains, ribbons of orange and red and lavender and blue flung across the sky." I love the use of the words "ribbons" and "flung", it's so artistic!

The way you went back and forth from Remus to the "unknown girl" created so much tension and really showed the contrast between how the two think of the moon.

Your description of Remus's transformation can be summed up in one word: outstanding! OMG, it was so emotional, and seemed so real! You've inspired me to write my own fic on Remus's transformation. I welcome you to come read it!

I like when she tells him that "forever is a long time"-you can tell that something's up.

The end is so tragic yet so perfect!

"“It’s just…” Her voice is soft, so soft he can hardly hear it, and so sorry and guilty. “I love the full moon more.”" It was the absolute perfect ending for this fic! Very dramtic and seriously pulls on heart-strings. It's sort of like a symbol, showing how the moon is constantly tormenting Remus in many different ways.

I've actually written a poem on how Remus sees the moon. Though I admit that I don't know how good I am at poetry, I'd love you to come and read it.

Beautiful, wonderful story. Please keep writnig, you've got talent!

That was wonderfully written and beautiful...and sad...I love your style of writing! And I loved this story!

Very bittersweet and beautiful. Your writing style is lovely. I love the full moon as well ... It's so gorgeous ...

Right ... Keep up the excellent stuff!

-ElvenYoukai-

This is so beautiful, and so sad. I like how it is made up from little snippets strung together. I love the part when 'she' talks about the things she loves to do on the full moon - can see it so clearly! Absolutely wonderful :)

Loved it! Excellent storyline and beautifully written! I love the full moon too!:D Are you going to continue it? I personally think it's good just the way it is! Anyways, great stuff!

Blessed be,

Blackstar