Aw! IT's so sad! i loved it! my one suggestion is that you should finish it off a little more. i don't want to be annoying or that much of a critic but it would be cool to have yami back. It's just that i think that yugi would be a little ** with out yami there with him. but to each his own right? I'm not a member of deviantart yet but i hope 2 be this christmas. I luv your art! it rox! i had an idea for a story with the yugioh gang in it... actually i have a couple.
One is a yugioh christmas carol, another is a silly comedy about what would happen if yami got stuck in this world along with yami bakura! I started writing the 2nd one. Please email me! i hope get on deviantart soon! Chao! xp x3 xp

;.; Waahh! So good though.

Good, very good. But I think you need to go into detail about the people and what's happening with them and spand less time on the surroundings. Other than that, good.
*~Yakubi~*

Beautiful! Whe I first saw this I was thinking how the hell could you put Yugioh and the Matrix together. But you did it, I love the storyline and it makes alot of sense. Love it, but I'm of to read the next chapter.
*~Yakubi~*

Does anyone else think that the Gemini shdaows should have a bigger role/ more elaborate diologue?

Sorry about the whole iffy monster magic thing.

Wow. Although that was slightly disturbing with all the tudes and pain...that was great so far. x] Can't resist the plot. Keep it up!

sorry its taken so long to update. i kinda forogt about this, but then someone emailed me asking to continue...

AH! This is so amazingly good! There is absolutly no way you can just leave that here! You need to write more! By the way i love your drawings on You are totally wicked! Like I said, pleez don't leave the story here! I need to find out what happens next! ^_^

Uh... I will try to update this soon. the last couple of chapters get really dramatic...

so... yeah...

the last couple of chapters are more worhtwhile to read than the first cuople of them (writing skill has improved. hee.)

I love your art work and this story. I saw on DeviantArt you have the 12th chapter up. So please update soon. It's a great story.

Dang, this ficcy roxxz!! I saw it on your DeviantArt site and decided to check it out. It's really an amzing plot and a good story! You made the Gemini Shadows look so cute! (Kuwabara: 0.o Are you kidding!? They were perverts!!) Plus you got the character's personalities right. Really imaginative. Keep it up!! This is an AWESOME fic! Why do you only have 4 reviews? *pouts* I'm gonna put it on my favs list and tell readers about it as soon as I can update another ficcy!! PLEASE UPDATE!!

O.O! Wow! So this is the infamous story you have been putting up on DA. You must continue!! To see Atem suffer and become this thing!! Please...I want the happy ending!!

Hiya, you updated again! Wow, dragon of dreams, I think that's very unique! Lol, and I am still haveing diffculty in remembering the codenumber Mx what-cha-call-it, lol. Update soon!

thanks, but i think the first chapter needs some tweaking... i still can't get a very good starting thing going on... this is my first fan fic by the way..