yeah trake it slow my ass just spring everything on him at once poor guy anyway i loved this chap too

I really can't follow this story. It's like trying to follow a thread through a twisted knot. There's no structure, or even direction, to this plot. You have good grammar and spelling, but your writing style needs a lot of work.

For most of the begining chapters of this story you spend too much time jumping from one thought to the next and throwing new characters into the mix without developing any type of plot. Thankfully, you seem to be learning from your earlier work and your most recent chapters have been showing signs of improvement. Hopefully, you will continue on in this fashion.

wow a awesome story!

A creative story which I find a bit confusing, it's probably all the serects about Noriko pasts and some of the people around her. I do find her quarrels with the Kyubi quite amusing

Ranma,Ryoga,Jousenkyo springs? So many Ranma 1/2 refrences! That's my Fav!(other than Naruto...)

I really love your story! Can't wait till the next one comes out. Keep up the good work.

This is an odd story. It like It i also wont to see how it will turn out

... I'M EVEN MORE CONFUSED NOW THAN BEFORE! But I don't like Yume, she's in league with Orochimaru! Will Konoko begin interacting with the rest of the rookies soon? All the OCs are getting confusing.

I usually don't like Hyuugas, but I really like Sen. Hehe, the kissing scene was nice. Lol. If Itachi's not an uber bad guy, I wouldn't mind Konoko ending up with him. Anyways, update soon!

Hehe...poor them...

is this naru/sasu? or kon/sasu? if it is thank you!

0_o A girl? ...AHAHAHAHAHAH!

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hope you can update soon 3 want to know what happens next XD