...MORE please add MORe font leave me hanging add MORE

Hehe, -blushes- I'm an idiot. Beofre I reviewed the last chapter, I didn't read the author's note. -silence- 0.o Yeah, I'm really stupid... Sorry.

Good story though!

Again, I'm really sorry... -silence-

I didn't read the fic yet, sorry... but, do you know of an anime called Princess Tutu?! Is this based off it? Ha! That would be so awesome...

... GR!! DAMN INO-BOAR!! grr!! anyway loved your story!! update soon!=^^=

Aww, Princess Tutu. I love that show, and Naruto.

OMG! PRINCESS TUTU! Yeah..I love that anime too but it had to end quickly and she (4got the name sorry cuz its been so long) stayed being a duck! NO!

how are you? yeah you kinda copy the same thing about the story of princess tutu. right

You might want to rethink this story's casting because with how the characters are, and if you are following the storyline of Pricess Tutu, the characters may not be paired off with who you expect. I'm wondering if you've even seen the entire anime if Princess Tutu. The way you seem to be attempting to pair off Sasuke and Sakura when Sasuke represent Mytho and Sakura represents Ahiru tells me you haven't. Finish watching the anime and repost this story with your own touch to make it predictable but not be considered plagiarism.

- Anime Insaniac

love it girl update soon

Now now.. I'm going to try to alleviate my friend's indignation and send you a review with some advice.

Basically, it'd be great if you did some research on ballet and added some ballet terms and movements in there. It makes the story slightly more realistic and interesting.

Also, make sure to add that dancers get -tired- at the end of each practice. They've been doing routines for 1.5hrs or so, so they'd be panting and sweating. ^_^

The story line is a bit cliche, no offence. You could... erm.. brighten it up, with some more interesting and original ideas. I mean, Sasuke just randomly asking Sakura to dance with him is just slighly.. off.

I'm not going to mention anything about realism (the fact that the closest thing Sasuke's gonna get to dancing is all the flips, jumps and graceful lands he does when he fights) because if it works for your story, then you can do whatever you like. And besides, it's fanfiction. It's crazy. X_X

Watch your writing. Look out for grammatical mistakes and errors in punctuation, expression etc. And of course, DETAIL DETAIL DETAIL! Don't overload the story with dialogue. Balance it equally with detail, description and paragraphs.

Anyway, work around with your plot, story and description. Have fun with it. Manipulate the characters and twist the plot to your liking. Just make it original and interesting, or else the story will get boring and over-done.

This, of course, is my constructive criticism. NOT flaming. Flaming is just unsupported, unjustified nonsense. I've noticed some errors in your fanfic and I'd just like to help you write your fic better by giving you some advice. It's your choice if you follow it. If you listen and take some of my advice, you'll do better.

Hey.. yeah.. it even says "A well rounded critique is often the most rewarding tool for the writer" below the submit button. ^_^

Ehh.. maybe if you listen you'll get less flames. Or not flames. *shrug* The final decision is up to you. >_

ok ... i had opened this fic, right. .. and .. well, i showed it to my friend oreo-chan because we usually share the fics that we read .. but ... there was something in it that.. well -sighs- ...

Akaru-hime’s rant:
... DO YOU HAVE BLOODLY ANY IDEA WHAT WE DO AT BALLET! I MEAN, FRIKING HELL ... THIS SO SO CLICHE ... THERES BARELY ANY GOOD BALLET TERMS IN THERE .. WHERE IS THE GRAND JETE? WHERE IS THE PAR DE CHAT? WHERE IS THE SOUS SOU? WHERE IS THE PLIATE? WHERE IS THE FREAKING PORTEBRA? ... I MEAN!! WHAT DO U THINK THAT WE DO FOR 1.5 HOURS? JUST STAND THERE AND STRETCH?!?!?!? NO! WE FREAKING DO EXERCISES! I MEAN ... EVEN THOUGH WE DO ALL THOSE TON L'AIRS AND ALL THOSE PRETTY PIROETTES IN FIFTH POSITION, I MEAN ... BALLET ISNT THAT FRIKING EASY WHEN U CAN DO AN ALTITUDE DEVON WITHOUT EVEN THINKING ... AND WTH WOULD SASUKE BE JUST RANDOMLY DANCING ... AND IF HE WERE DANCING, IT WOULD BE TO FRIKING CLASSICAL MUSIC ... AND ... GEE ... IF YOU’RE GOING TO WRITE A FIC ... RESEARCH THE BLOODY SPORT AND CONTEXT, DAMNIT!! OTHERWISE THE REAL BALLET DANCERS ARE SERIOUSLY OFFENDED!
AND GUESSING MY THE TITLE, IS SAKURA AND SASUKE GOING TO DANCE SWAN LAKE? DID U RESEARCH THE FOUR LITTLE SWANS AND THEIR 16 PAR DE CHAT? THE ALLEGRO WALTZ OF THE SWANS? THE THREE ACTS?
AND IF THEY START TO DO A PAS DE DEUX, DO U KNOW HOW HARD IT IS TO LEARN IT? AND HOW TO SYNCONISE? WE DONT JUST GO "LETS DANCE THIS SO AND SO" AND KNOW EXACTLY WHAT YOUR PARTNER IS DOING ... WE SPEND UP TO 3 MONTHS LEARNING THAT FRIKING DANCE!
STRETCHES FOR 3 HOURS ... WHT GRADE ARE THEY IN? 6TH? 7TH? ARE THEY DOING THEIR MAJORS? PRE-ELEMENTARY? ELEMENTARY? WHAT TYPE OF BALLET? AMERICAN? BRITISH? ITALIAN? FRENCH? WHY ARE THEY STRETCHING FOR 3 HOURS ... IF U EVER WENT TO A BALLET CLASS, IF YOU WERENT STRETCHING, YOU WOULD BE PRACTISING YOUR EXERCISES SUCH AS ADAIGE OR WALTZ ...
OOH .. AND YES ... AFTER DANCING ANY DANCES, U ARENT JUST PRISTINE PERFECT AND NOT TIRED ... U'RE FREAKING EXAUSTED AND SWEATING ... EVEN IF YOU WATCH THE DANCES AND IT LOOKS SO DAMN 'EASY', DO YOU KNOW HOW HARD IT IS TO GET INTO ALL OF THOSE POSITIONS? EVEN WITHOUT THE BLOODY POINTE SHOES? AND HOW MUCH EFFORT AND THOUGHT WE HAVE TO PUT INTO EVERY BLOODY MOVEMENT? THE NO-SICKLING OF THE POINTED FEET. THE JUMPS AT THE RIGHT HEIGHT .. AND ALL OF THOSE POSITIONS IN THE ARMS, LEGS AND ARABESQUE...
I GIVE UP .. IF YOU ARE GOING TO WRITE A FIC, AU OR OTHERWISE, RESEARCH THE DAMN THING!! i have never flamed this much before ... but .. this just insulted me ...

This chapter was the worse, nothing but...POORLY written daiolog~ And you don't need to do chapter recaps, its pointless and stupid. And don't go after or mid in a sentence:

(Naruto is there for decoration)

That was dumb as well. Explain what Naruto is doing and perhaps why for a bonus. Otherwise you look lazy and didn't put any effort into this. And stop explaining Sasuke's speak as 'bored tone' Cause you're BORRING(pun intended) and annoying me with it. And Naruto doesn't always scream, stop making ihm look like an idiot, geeze, dislike people that potray him this way...

AND RMORE RANDOM JAPANESE...

If Sasuke has a girlfriend(Why Ino?)why not practice with her? Or have her watch him or something? Why should he care to want to dance with Sakura again? Why is Naruto being an annoying tard?

And WHY did you make Naruto look SUPER stupid? I know I mentioned this more than once, but the whole ramen bit was insulting and boarderline horrible.

I don't have much to say about this chapter, just improve and edit the previous chapter to show if you actually care about this fic.

This story is very poorly organized... The whole structure, daiolog, plot... just ew.

First, put quotations when a person thinks... because when you go

I feel like I'm in a dream sakura thought happily

IT MAKES NO SENSE. It looks like

Sakura say's: "I am in a dream sakura thought happily" It's like, speaking in third person or something.

and you don't have to bold Naruto's yellings either. Just find a word to use for his loud tone of voice...

Then he realized Sakura was there.
“Oh HI! I’m Naruto!” Naruto said happily.
o.O" “Uh hi..” She said embarrassed.

WHY DID YOU USE A FACIAL EXPRESSION IN A STORY? D< I LOATHE THOSE! THEY ARE NOT MEANT TO BE USED IN STORIES...EVER.

Kill it.

And double enter too, that was badly jumbled together

I am going to review each chapter I read so you don't use the 'I bet you hadn't read the whole thing' excuse :\

irst chapter, the first thing that catches my eyes is that OBNOXIOUS: "TWET"

wtf?

all you had to do is simply state that the bird tweeted loudly...geeze. And why did you write this whole chapter in bold anyway?

the random japanese= FREAKING ANNOYING.

Damn it, I hate people that use random japanese besides Chan, Kun, San, and sama. THOSE are okay, but when you throw in random words in ENGLISH WRITTEN DAIOLOG...its damn stupid. "I am such a baka" I am such a stupid, yes, right. Perfect sense.

Ohayou= Ohayo

NO "U".

And why such a cold bastard, that is Sasuke, wanting to dance with her RANDOMLY if even in this universe, he has annoying fans of doom? no sense. Oh, and when a new person speaks, NEW PARAGRAPH.

rawrg, next chapter

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RAMEN FOR THE WORLD'S GREATEST SECRET!