Reviews for Concrete Angel

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KagomeH.Xovers 2008-09-23 ch 3,	abuseSo Ayame is Kagome and Souta's mother and she's the one who beats them, correct. is Kagome and Souta related to any of the Reikai Tentei, and if Kagome's family are youkai then how are they in the Ningenkai. update soon.
g2fan 2008-07-01 ch 3,	abuseI like the story so far. Please update. Wendy
angelkitty77 2008-06-27 ch 3,	abusei am sorry about not leaving a review i just found your story when a C2 put it up. the pairing is a great one and i wonder what kagome is, i read it twice and you dont say or did i just miss it. cant wait to read more
Kidnapped by a Demon 2008-06-27 ch 3,	abuseawesome update soon please
Bunny On-A High 2008-06-27 ch 3,	abuseYes, I am determind too get you to write th next chapter, that is a reason I keep writing(to bad we're only allowed 1 review per chapter...), I am set on getting you to the 15 ATLEAST! Another thing, because I'm a fanatic in everyting I do, for the ages Hiei and Kurama(well Kurama has an excuse because he was actually born again, atleast the fox was...) aren't really acurate. Not saying that I know them, but both of them are demons who have their own back stories that made them who they are. So wouldn't they be older, or are you just writing down what age they appear to be since you don't know their actual age(not that I do). And Yusuke's a half demon...if you haven't watched that far ahead then..well...I'm sorry for ruining it for you. But if you already know are you going to be putting that in the story? Is this going to be AFTER everying happens or before, cause there are some major character changes and ability upgrades! Now that I've took up a suffient amount of your time forcing you to read this (via telepathy: you just didn't notice;P), I'll recognise that I am the 14 review. Might want to start that chapter up early. I promise to give you my AMAZING insight! AND if you put it up and I review you'll have fifteen, plus all the other people who've favorited it! Just make a big note at the top telling them to review and the consiquences if they don't! ...sorry, I was rambling. Later, Ems! P.S.
Bunny On-A High 2008-06-26 ch 2,	abuseI'm doing this as I read, so don't expect anything great. It's funny that you start the second chapter like it's the beginning of the story. You've already introduced your characters(save the baby) , what's the point of not using their names? How old is Souta? In the first chapter you described him as being kind of an infant. Descristions on how people are being held and stuff like that help. I forgot, at the top you might want to bolt the chapter title or underline it so people can easily tell where the story begins. Please put more talking and action(I'm a sucker for action;P) now that you've kind of set up their characters a bit. I love reading how people voice their thoughts.(I actually could care less if you take this specific advise if you think it took away from your story) AND not many people read the A/N at the top of the story, so to make something obvious you got to make it so people can see it. Like for how you write that their "thoughts" was small so no one paid any mind. 'Italics' are thoughts
Bunny On-A High 2008-06-26 ch 1,	abuseHullo, I'm Ems and I am here because of your A/N. I'm one of those people who are in the "can't do so they teach" group. I've reread your chapter and found that you miss spell words(most likely to continue a train of thought) by just missing letter, and when you skim over it you don't catch it because it's so small. Heie didn't have a reaction. If someone sprouted black wings and flew into the tree above you would you just sit there like it was normal? I know that Hiei is a spirit detective, but did he think she was a human or did he already know she wasn't normal? Reactions are important too, they can show what people think of something. Those were the most obvious things to me so I've decided to mention them. I still like your story on the whole though and am going to leave a review for your next chapter. You've been warned!
Kira 2008-06-26 ch 3, anon.	abusei don't really review much since i read many many many ughh to many to count hiei/kagome fics. but i have to say your fic is doing quite well. i never tell anyone ideas since i like to see what fic writers create on their own. the black wings was a nice touch to the fic though. i wish to know the background on the wings. so i hope you get your 15 reviews so i may find out. good luck
Ebony Cassandra selene Ridd... 2008-06-26 ch 2,	abuseI love it so update soon
Kidnapped by a Demon 2008-06-26 ch 2,	abusepoor kags so in this story does she ever go back in time to inu and everyone or not?
Reads-way-2-much 2008-06-24 ch 2,	abusei love it please update ASAP
Kaylyn17 2008-06-24 ch 2,	abuseGood story. I love the martina song. How many chapters are there going to be? Kaylyn
YukimuraShuusuke Girl 2008-06-24 ch 2,	abuseI love this story! Love the pairing too!
SabakunoJaganshi 2008-06-23 ch 2,	abuseHow adorable! I lovethese kind of Hiei and Kagome fcs. I'm a huge fan of the song also I can't wait till you put it in the fic. I just had a mental pic of Hiei seeing Kagome wearing the same dress, you know the "Wearing the same dress she wore yesterday" Really cool, continue please? SabakunoJaganshi
Lady Niona 2007-07-28 ch 2,	abuseThis is a nice story please update soon!!

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