Assuming that there will be a climax sometime in this story, I suggest that you include some more and more rising action each chapter that builds up to the high point in the plot.

I like it, I truely do. I don't really like the present tense stuff though. Oh well what ever flouts your boat :)

DAMN i just read what I missed...*drools* you write so well. I cant wait to see what happens next! :-D

Not really liking the present tense style, but I'll overlook it as long as you continue to use as much or more detail. (The opening scene in the first chapter was excellent.)I still recomend double spacing between paragraphs, who knows...you might get more readers that way.

I Love It. I especially like Made Of Stone and something tells me this will be even better! Keep it going!

this is even better than made of stone!(i may not have reviewed that, but it was good all the same :)) awesome sequel

Kaitlyn/TerraBB