This is good, especially for your 1st one-shot. I think you described the thoughts and feelings well. It is like Oishi to worry, and I can understand him for not wanting to let others know about the kiss. I would feel the same way, too. I'm glad the Golden Pair confessed and settled their problems.

when Kikumaru mentioned Fuji, I had a feeling he had asked Fuji about confessions and kissing, and Fuji had given him some advice. I also like how you included a little bit of Captain Tezuka and Fuji. It seems like Fuji was about to confess to Captain Tezuka and maybe do something more. Captain Tezuka might also make the Golden Pair run laps the next day.

I didn't expect Echizen to pay attention to the Golden Pair kissing, and even drag someone else to see it. He is not the type to care what people are doing, but i guess he coincidentally saw something too unexpected and confusing for him. He probably wanted answers from Momoshiro, and they were probably planning to hang out together afterwards.

That is very typical of Inui and his notebook. I wonder if he and Kaidou also have something planned.

Haha, I love how everyone came and saw them and left before they noticed. xD That was a pretty amazing scene. Like, really. Hilarious.

Thanks a ton for the laughs. These two are SO CUTE 3

AW THIS WAS SO CUTE KAWAI ALL THE REGULARS SAW IT TOO GO GOLDEN PAIR MUCH LOVE TO EIJI AND OISHI FORVR!

IM INSPIRED TO WRITE MY OWN ON THEM BUT ON FRIENDSHIP FIRST THAN LOVE NEXT YEAR!

M after years finally I give my review T_T. Gomenasai

Anyway- I LOVE THIS STORY -. I love your Ooishi.Ooishi is Ooishi-always worried over things but Ooishi kissed Eiji back - in broad daylight, right outside the locker room - is priceless XD.

Naa you should write more GP Fluff if you have more time .XD.

That's all Ganbare XD *runs to review another fic

And so I was like, "Have I read this one before?" So I skipped to the end (which I have a tendency of doing ANYWAY, because I'm an awesome lame-o who likes to be spoiled) and realized "Hey, I DID read this before!" Then I didn't remember if I had reviewed it over at the LJ, so I decided to do it here. Not that I ever have anything COHERENT to say, but I'm sure you don't mind.

I'm getting pretty wrapped up in this world of GP & T/N. Not that I meant to...*curse Fencer* but eh, I ain't complainin'. But I should probably quit acting like this is the LJ where you can actually reply BACK to me. Yesh, I am stupid. But I liked the fic (in case I didn't say it before) because it was sweet and it made my smile (much to my embarrassment because there are others around me who are giving me funny looks).

Oh, that was so so cute! I enjoyed it very much. (especially the part where Inui contemplates buying a new notebook XD) Thank you for writing this, it was very sweet.

Congragulations... you have succeeded in makeing me giggle insanely... not that that's hard to do... -.-;;

Oh, that was SO kawaii! I'm in complete Golden Pair obbsession mode now! . E! Saa, that was... was... am I over reacting? I am, aren't I? Oh well, I'll be sleeping on a bed of fluff for the rest of my life...

So col! That is SO cool! So cool! So-so-so-so-SO cool!...I think you get it now...;...but seriously, I just LOVED it to death! *mumbles* cool...

Kya! They're so kawaii!

*Squeals incessantly and GLOMPS the Golden Pair* Sque! LOL .; How utterly adorable! Aw, I just want to squish them to death! Very much enjoyed this! *Nod*Nod* _

enjoyed it?

reading that was the perfect way to start this morning

thanks heaps for writing it

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Aw that was so adorable! Love love Golden Pair fluff, it's an esstential for living, like air or water, and never possible to get enough of. My favorite line had to be Inui's comments about needing a new notebook after having gotten so much data in one day. I actually laughed out loud then. Good characterization with everyone, and I liked Eiji's attitude about the whole thing. Very much in line with his sensibilities and with how open he is. I hope you plan on writing more fluffy pieces, this one was quite good :)

I really enjoyed reading this! Your characterisation was really nice, with some *excellent* details that made the characters come alive. I especially liked the way you made Eiji act irritated, because he was emitting all sorts of Eiji-type vibes there! Thank you for writing this, and I look forward to what you write next!

cute!

Good story... very nice with an interesting concept... nicely written... I enjoyed it alot... maybe Inui should start a book just for "relationships" lol... anyways... good story nya! -