Dude, you are supposed to post new chapters,not stories dude. anyway, it is good.

u bastard u killed mattias nillson the coolest character in mercinaries u go to hell u go to hell and u die

(Pardon the language) This is fuckin' awesome, but how could you kill Mattias?

yeah, I liked it, but it was pretty short...I meen I dont make MY stories short...*ahem*...

Mine is only so-so? Fair enough, didn't spend much time on the editing.

Looks like yours is straightforward action. That's ok, but can't you flesh out the story some more? The dialouge is fine, but it just seems so short...it's ok, don't get me wrong, i've seen much worse. But it needs more storyline and detail. Like who is this "Jack?"

Hey man! Glad you're finally on board with the rest of us grunts! Wow, fifteen years later? That's ok, it's cool. Damn, an assassin so good that they not only iced the head of ExOps but our three favorite mercenaries as well...looking forward to seeing more!