Reviews for A Different Side: Wild 12

Reviews For: A Different Side: Wild 12

Baron Hausenpheffer 2005-02-23 ch 6,	abuseFine job on the wrap-up! This isn't a pro or a con, but I noticed that you basically had everything that happened "in the dream" (ie. before Ryo left) happen again "in real life", just more in-character. I still have a hard time imagining Kasumi hitting anyone (at least without immediately covering them head-to-toe in Band-aids), but I think it needed to be that way for the story to work out as you wished it to. I was also pleased by this much kinder portrayal of Cologne; that old lady loves her granddaughter a WHOLE lot, or she would never go through so much trouble for her. Finally, I just thought that I would mention that I really liked Genma's reaction to Ukyo's hug. I just struck me as kind of sweet. (P.S. Good ending twist with Ryoga, too.) I have one last thing to add: I think I've pinpointed your biggest source of OOC-ness. Everbody seems to have some emotion or plot device that they tend to favor too much, throwing characters' personalities out-of-whack (I often make them too tempermental, for example). I think YOUR Achilles' heel is making the R1/2 crew too serious. Even when Ranma and Co. are trying to be serious, it rarely comes out that way. Anyhoo, I just thought I'd mention that as it might help you out later. You did a great job on this story; two thumbs up. Good luck on your future works!
Baron Hausenpheffer 2005-02-21 ch 5,	abuseI would say that this chapter is an improvement, but then I've never been one for enormous understatements! This chapter seemed really well-thought-out; I especially liked the buildup of how Ryoga and Choko sensed that something was "rotten in Denmark/Furinkan" (i.e. order reigning and Chaos being ticked-off about it). Like Ryoga said, Chaos might have been an angry deity, but he was a fairly reasonable guy. Cool way to swing the "weirdness pendlum" of Nerima back to the center without erasing what was done, by the way. (You left the Ranma-Kasumi thing a very real possibility.) Finally, it was good to see the cast from "A Different Side" again. I'm really looking forward to the wrap-up, and in a good way this time. Adios for now, par-ten-er!
jh 2005-02-21 ch 4, anon.	abuseThis is the Baron, who didn't feel like signing in. No offense, but I'm glad this story is almost over; the OOC-ness and constant Akane-bashing are starting to give me headaches. Maybe the ending will be better. Continue on, young fellow!
***** 2005-02-21 ch 1, anon.	abuseWhy is the story "wild 12"? whqt does twelve mean?
Baron Hausenpheffer 2005-02-20 ch 3,	abuseFor once, I'll try to be brief. First off, I'm not going flame you for your OOC-ness (not the way I would've done it, but then it's not MY story). However, there is one thing that you must understand VERY clearly: nobody, and I mean NOBODY, dodges the deadly splashes of ladle-lady! Hahaha! (One of the basic facts of Ranma-physics, you know...) Anyway, my lone suggestion is don't throw in the "furo scenes" unless they have a real purpose. Keep up the good work!
Rain Urameshi 2005-02-19 ch 2,	abuseMe: Hey, great re-write! This is coming along great! I can't wait for your next update! Sora: ((grinning)) We all like the Ranma/Kasumi pairing. Keep it up!
Baronnia Waives the Rules 2005-02-18 ch 2, anon.	abuseHeh, heh. I'm so sneaky... First off, kudos to you for the rewrite. Those are always headaches to do, but you did a fine job on it. I especially liked the fight scenes between Ryo and Genma & Ryoga. It was refreshing to see Nabiki getting a taste of her own mercenary medicine, too! Heh, heh. I see you decided to integrate one of Ranma 1/2's (in)famous bath scenes into this. I can definitely see its usefulfulness here (a place where just the three of them can talk), so that's okie-dokie. I wonder what the next person to come in there will think, though... ("OMG! Where did all of this blood come from?! Murder! Murder!") The whole "Ranma-Kasumi" thing seemed a bit... fast in the rewrite; not necessarily rushed, but fast. That's okay though, as it can be easily explained by the emotion "simmering" between them for a long time. I hope that "transformation spell" that Ryo(ga) cast on Ryoga isn't permanent; it seems like a pretty harsh punishment for an accident... By the way, I have a plot-twist suggestion that I'll email to you. Anyway, keep up the good work!
Baron Hausenpheffer 2005-02-15 ch 2,	abuseWell, let me start off by saying that this story is progressing nicely, and your writing skills seem sharper than ever. Also, Ranma-Kasumi fics are a rarity, but this is shaping up to be a nice one. With that said, I begin my long, angry rant that I hope I won't later regret... First off, the OOC-ness of this story is through the roof. Ranma and Genma are okay, but everyone else is a cariacture of their normal selves, especially Akane. While seeing her fly into the fish pond was fun, and while I do engage in Akane-bashing myself from time to time, this version is way out of wack. She's not stupid, she's not deranged, and she's not violent without good reason. Secondly, why is everyone puzzled by Ryoga's identity? I thought the Kingom Hearts version was identical to the normal version, so there should be confusion of persons, not a "who is he?" scenario. Finally, and most important by far, you are indeed slipping into a "Ryoga is a martial arts god" rut. Unless he's taken by surprise, he's basically invincible. Even if Ryoga is somehow hurt, all he has to do is trance or cast "curaga" and POOF!; he's good as new. I'm begging on my hands and knees to give Ryoga a challenge by making him weaker. I don't really care how it's done: his Keyblades could get stolen, Happosai could use the weakness-inducing moxibustion, or whatever else you could come up with. Just find SOME way to give this story a "challenge" infusion in the arm! (P.S. Having your characters pass out after every battle doesn't count as adding to the challenge.) Well, that's the end of my rant. I really hope I wasn't too harsh or anything; you are one of my favorite fanfic authors out there, and I offer this psychotic raving as my version of "tough love". I still look forward to seeing where you take this (the premise is great), and look forward to your next update. Hopefully, I'll have taken my medication by that point... Later!
Baron Hausenpheffer 2005-02-12 ch 1,	abuseEgad! It's "Kingdom Hearts Ranma 1/2" meets "Normal (Abnormal?) Ranma 1/2"! Will the world ever be the same? Probably not; it changes every day... Anyway, what am I talking about?! I'm very pleased that you toned Ryoga's power level down somewhat. This seems like a pretty good "middle path" between pathetically weak and ludicrously powerful. I wonder how this world's Ranma will match up? I'll most likely keep following this, so keep up the good work!
Rain Urameshi 2005-02-12 ch 1,	abuseMe: ((blinks, reads again, then blinks twice)) You know...this is great. Having 'Keymaster Ryouga' find the original NWC...((is getting red from an effort to keep a straight face)) Sora: ((sweatdrops)) Maybe while he's at it, he can have me and Riku crash-land in Nerima or something, ne? Me: And ruin the whole 'Ryouga is the Keyblade master' thing? Sora: If Ryouga's in some alternate dimension, then there is the slight chance that me and Riku could be there, too. Me: Good point...((to author)) I love where this is going, so far. I can't wait until Keymaster Ryouga ends up fighting the rest of the original NWC in the dojo...beating the tar out of the other him, Genma...getting a good fight out of Ranma... Yamiko: Remember, Ranko. Ranma's completing the final step of his 'training'. Me: Right...like I believe that 'The Force is with Ranma', Yamiko. ((to Author)) You are so going on my Author Favorite's list, and this story's going on my Story Faves list, like the last one. Keep up the great work!
Nichole Hibiki 2005-02-11 ch 1, anon.	abuseI'm just glad this story is being continued cause Ryoga is my all time favorite character please update another chapter soon.

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