The last line blew me away. Whoa...Wonderful story.

I think it was lovely as it was. A very gentle and just a tiny bit angsty story, that works very well :D

Aww. beautiful. Very true to the characters.

nice fic. simple. short. it ended quite abruptly and kinda left me wanting for more but I guess there's no onther way to end it, so its okay. I'm a big fan of the RizaXRoy pairing and personally, I think you made an accurate description of how it would be like if these two would really go out. Nice.

that's all there is to say I guess.. and yeah, keep it up!

lovely, very unique. The only thing is that you seemed to focus more on Roy than on Riza, and it might be interesting for her to be portrayed a little more vibrantly. good job, though.

Hey!
This is a great fic!
Sorry I don't speak English very well, I'm Brazilian
But I like your fic so much!!
Continue please!!
Thanks

You know, I wasn't sure what I thought of this at first, but as I finished reading it, I was just going "I really like this". Something about the flow, even the writing itself seemed routine. Not mundane, but it flowed so well that it had this effortless 'this is how things happen every once and again' ring to it. Very smooth.

I liked it!

Short, but sweet :P

It was interesting, your style is what I haven't read for a long time...:) The way you wrote it, only describing them, and not giving away their names was so different...

That was why they concluded separately, yet thoughtfully, that waiting was not a bad idea. The least they wanted to do was bring more matters to deal with into the open, let alone personal matters. So, they waited. Although, all was not lost, for they still had their occasional routines to remind them what and who they were doing all this for, regardless of how much this process seemed to hurt.

Okay that was a bit long, but I liked that part a lot...It's so true... :P

Haha RoyAi rocks! :)

moony.rj

Nicely done!

Interesting work. I enjoyed the subtle touch you used. Very bittersweet, how they're both just a step away from what they want, yet don't take that step.

uh-hun...
i didn't really like this one.
don't get me wrong; i love your writing styl.
f.a.b.u.l.o.u.s.o
but it's just that...well, Riza an' Roy don't really seem to be the 'non-chatty' type to me. If they meet each other on the street, like they did in this fic, then BOOM! conversaion like that! an' it didn't really seem all that Royai to me.
'But Hey! You're the author.'

so...'please, keep writing!'

A good story, very nice, though, to be honest, we could've done without the final sentece. The main thing it seems to do is make an overall 'sweet' fic feel a bit...'sour'. Admittedly it makes us take another glance at the what had happened, but, I guess I just don't like sour that much.

I enjoyed the cute little description of their impromptu "date". I can imagine some of this sweet shy/awkwardness/bantering between these two.

Towards the end it got a little too broad with the "they knew" so on - I could do with a little more concise description of each POV, as you did in the lines before.

Would also love to see more Royai from you! ^_^

That one was interesting but seemed a little sad. Very good piece of writing though. :)

nice, simple and elegant