Very pretty. I liked it.

i like it alot i could't find anythig wronge..get job with your words...

I can see that you had fun with words, but... a few too many "-ly"s. It is the sort of tense which fast grows annoying.
Aside from that, delightful! I await the next post with eagerness.

You really know how to write well.

You do a good job, but it seems you only really get to what you want to at the end. If your purpose is to use Milton's Satan (I can't really speak towards Charles II as I haven't done much research on him) as a basis, it's the clearest just at the end, with the apples and the 'king in his underworld of blood and greed'. Before it, it seems... well, a prelude, a description, but all just leading up to that one line in a way.

Then again, I'm certainly not as familiar with Milton's Satan as I should be to be critiquing that, and I'm sure there are allusions in here that I miss from not having read the entire poem. It's certainly an interesting take on the man, although I'd wonder where you heard that Hook was based on Satan, and if so who Pan was based on. (Just a bit of scholarly trivia. I've always taken Hook to be the stand-in for the author.) It seems to me that Hook is altogether too sympathetic a character to be portrayed as the Devil, but maybe I'm reading too much into this.

In any case, this is an excellent piece and I love your voice (not to mention your scholarly pretention, you can never have too much of that). It's very poetic and flowing here, which really suits the source of Paradise Lost quite well. Good job, keep writing.

Marvelous! I would say it was spectacular too if I didn't hate the word. But that is beside the point. Anyway, this was a very, very well-written piece. And if you would only continue to write "heavier" material like this -- O! the people you would satisfy! Readers like me who long for thoughtful and intriguing material -- such as what you are capable of writing -- instead of the brainless, imperfect fluff that is so prevalent.
Oh well... I guess you can't have everything you want, can you? Anyway, keep writing; you were born to do it.
Georgie

Elegant, very elegant...
I love your parodies, too!
love,
Doc M