Hey, this is Elly_Marion from the FF9 board! (Yes, I have a fanficcie account too.)

Fratley sniffing perfume was just...LOL

This story was funny. I did like it. I was in a bad mood while reading but now I'm hapy! ;p Just cause, yah. Anyway, Are you going to continue or is this the end of the story?

Most interesting, ya? Funny thing is, I've enjoyed reading this more than many stories that are, technically, better-written. But there's a difference between knowing how to arrange your words and punctuation and knowing how to tell a story. You have the latter; and with time and practice will acquire the former.

Now . . . UPDATE!

I must say, dearie, that you do quite a job of awakening within the reader the desire to thoroughly "pwn" Amarant, or to simply deliver a solid, swift kick to the nads with steel-toed boots. *Adds to Favorite Authors list for the sheer hell of it* I'm curioius to see how Freya will be ready . . . with harsh words, or a drawn weapon? I prefer the idea of the latter in this case.

It lacks polish, but has good flow for the most part, I think. Flow is that thing which is not quite possible to describe, and can only be grasped by reading. A lot. For a long time. Anyway, good work; you consistently surprise me with the quality of your writing.

..just update soon will ya?

I love this story! It's funny and Fratley is a total crack head. I like the way you gave their life an update with the whole DVD and disney thing. And how Fratley now sniffs purfume. It's genius. Update soon.

Hey, well, I hate the Fratley/Humor mix but I managed to get to chapter 4...so I liked it. The reason you may not be having that much reviews is because you don't accept anonymous ones...yeah, that could be it. Anyhow, update ASAP.

Hehe, poor Fratley...I like it! Keep writing!