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I enjoyed reading this story, and I particularly loved the idea of the Morgendorff sisters heading a Mafia family, but I think you need to polish and develop this more.

This story reads like something you wrote and posted without bothering to go back and revise your work. You might consider adding more things to it, like additional chapters or background information on how Daria became a capa.

As others have mentioned in earlier reviews, you make some bad spelling mistakes (ex: 'senter' for 'center' and 'lieing' for 'lying') and some really bad punctuation choices. Your line, "He opened his mouth, but words failed him, when he saw, what was before him." should really read, “He open is mouth, but words failed him when he saw what was before.”

Good luck with this. You made a great start.

Couple of spelling and grammer errors, but otherwise it was nice.

Perhaps you could accompany this one with others, perhaps have Sandi heading a rival gang that comes into conflict with Daria's Mafia or something?

I'm sorry but I'm completely lost...

This doesn't make any sense at all. Sorry but I am just alone in the dark wandering around, stubbling over a few people trying to find the light switch.

Hm . . . that was different. Pretty good story.