gasp! *sob*

"Finally one day he grabs her by the wrists and yells into her face.
"Lords, will you just stop? Just STOP."
And her face is drawn and terrible, her eyes like a freight carrier coming towards him at a million miles an hour.
"I CAN’T!" "

"Kara," he breathes, aghast and weary.
She blinks at him, ghost-smiling, their faces almost close enough to rub noses

"He doesn’t think to reach through the bars and touch her. He doesn’t even know that it’s what she needs."

"And in the years to follow he sometimes catches himself, his fingers squeezing - open and close - reliving the sensation, trying to catch the memory of her, her warmth and her scent, safe in the circle of his hands."

And my god the dance scene at that club - it just ripped my heart out. I would copy that whole passage in here if i could.

Brillinat story sangga... i don't have the words to describe it. Its just so raw and vivd and amazingly real. And the imagery...guh! I would copy half you're story into this box if i were to pick every line that grabbed me.

I love it!

Crimsonshadoe

Good story! I've read several along the same lines, and this is by far the best. Nice plot, good dialogue (both internal and verbal.) Well done - KNS

Wow! Great characterizations. The first and last paragraphs are amazing.

seva

You are fast becoming my fave BSG writer. This was angsty, moving and spot-on.

Wow. That's incredibly good -- I love how you handled their grief and the characterisations are excellent.

Very nice story. You really pulled Kara's psyche apart and gave it a good airing. I'd love to see a second chapter, where she and Lee meet again.

::deep breath::

Oh. My. God. I think this may be one of the best things I have ever had the privlege to read. I thought the beginning was the best part, with the great metaphor of weak foundations.

Then I read the rest of it. Now I'm at a loss for words.

((Ok, the ending was definitely the saddest, sweetest, bestest part.))

This was a really amazing story, very well written. I could actually see Lee and Kara doing and saying these things. Great job!

This was great -- complicated, painful and powerful. A realistic glimpse into what could be part of the complex backstory for Lee and Kara. I'm really impressed and look forward to your next story in the fandom.

Wow. This was a really powerful story. I can't say I ENJOYED it, exactly. It's too sad for that. But it fits perfectly with what we know of their relationship on the show, and I could totally see this happening. Really, really nice job. Thanks for sharing it.

Angsty, but hopeful too. Loved the detail and emotion. Great stuff – looking forward to more soon.

Bravo! This is outstanding.

Very, very beautiful.

great. very dark, but still fun, one of my new favorites.