I like it a lot so far. I laughed at the meatball fight and could picture it in my head pretty easily, which is always a good thing. It seems pretty in character so far, the writting is good (Praise you for you can use the spell checker, unlike some writers...) And I look forward to more.

Now even...

for those of you who actually read these reviews before (or after) the story, Arthen hasn't been a major player because i have be sidetracked with school, and a fic to give Arthen some back story.

My fic isnt anywhere near done (it was supposed to be a short one chapter, but it didnt agree.), but i am going to get the ending finished (odd...the ending after the begining but before the middle!) so i can help out with the current fic more.

(and don't worry i am going to get ocean to put his writing spin on the back story fic so it isnt utter crap ^^;;)

kool fic~!! more more more! and yer crossing over with gokudo?! thats sounds fun~!! :D

Good start! It was very funny and I can't wait to read more. ^_^