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Nachoman1
2006-12-13 . chapter 6
Hello there.

I have loved how you have been giving away little bits and pieces of the past that led to the present, ratter than add a lot of flashbacks and some other plot devices. It keeps me going back to past chapters looking for all those nibbles of information that lead to a particular dish.

So far, Ranma and Nabiki are married, are high ranked officers (a vessel Commodore and a desk Admiral) on a kind of Space Command that off-shot from technology acquired through the Star Gate proyect, have a newlyborn daughter and gave the parents a one fingered salute before escaping the original engagement. Apparently, you have also made some radical changes to the continuity of the series with stuff like Ryoga never having showed up in Nerima during the two years, Ranma accepting Shampoo as a wife, and probably Genma being the only cursed individual (which seems dubious as Ryu Kumon took Ranma's place, which would have needed 'Ranko and Mr. Panda' to happen).

About your note on chapter 6, I might also point out that "going Commando" is a coloquial expression denoting the lack of underwear.

I'll keep reading. I've liked it a load so far.
Blackdex
2006-05-19 . chapter 19
Okay, I guess I can’t weasel out of a review this time. Ill start with the negative. This trilogy literally gave me a headache, and that’s hard to do, it leapt topics and subjects with no transitions, left no sense of time, and abandoned plot points with startling regularity. In the positive, it was concise and to the point, with very little "fluff" and no discernable filling for word count (WAY to low for my taste, btw, but it helps that their were three, so I am not listing that under negative). The plot was very original, and you may have just convinced me to buy a copy of X-Com. I’m not entirely sure why, but the piece reminded me of one of my own, older pieces (don’t look, its not fanfic, so it’s not on the site), it’s not really all that similar, but I can’t help but compare the two in my mind. I truly enjoyed this piece, and would highly recommend it. Well, Ciao
weebee
2006-01-22 . chapter 1
OK. since I just picked a Random book out of this series to review, this review is for your entire series Ranma X-Com Crossover... thing.

Okay... this was weird... very very weird... but also pretty good. You managed to tell a pretty good story, however your Ranma was rather OOC... well, he may not be OOC but since we weren't able to see what happened with him and shampoo before the start of the series I don't know.

You're DEFINATELY an Akane hater... and while I am not, your Akane bashing was not bad enough to interrupt the fic so it's all good.

I disagree with your take on Nodoka, however she's such a minor character that it doesn't really matter.

Hmm... this is starting to look like a flame... sorry.

Ranma as a member of the dirty pair? You are one evil, evil person. Funney as h*

Hmm... Kodachi's rather unexplainable. How the heck did she pass the psych exams?

Your use of Ranma's curse was... inventive... and I like how you kept it without making it a major part of the fic until near the end. Personaly, I like "Ranko" in moderation, not your feast or fammen aproach to her, however you did pretty good with the curse. Will we see any more of it?

Wil we see any more of this fic?

Can you get me a list of X-Overs? I can see Ranma, EVA, Macross, X-Com and a few others... any other major ones I'm missing?

Oh well. Keep it up and continue writing. PLEASE!
Lerris
2005-03-07 . chapter 19
Good overall. Overall I'm quite impressed at the speed of your writing while maintaining decent quality. I think I noticed a few typos here and there, but nothing major. I'm not quite sure if it would help for you to write at a slower pace, but if it would then the resulting fiction might be very good indeed.

Overall a fun read. Oh one random idea I had would be what if there was a reset fic where Ranma says something like, "Boy if I could do it over again I'd have never picked the tomboy." One would have to add in some variations and such so you do _not_ repeat the R1/2 arc. At any rate its just a random, possibly bad idea, I might do it someday if I get really bored, if no one else does.
Nairojam
2005-03-07 . chapter 19
Wow! I just read all 3 stories today, and I am just blown away! Truly EXCELLENT work! Can't Wait Till the next story!

Wonder how long it will take for people to twig about 'Ranko'?
Queenmunchkin
2005-03-05 . chapter 19
I love this story it keeps getting better, even if you killed off Laura's husband GR. I think that you write great stories and should keep on writing.
You still haven't taken me up on my offer to carry your babies. Well?
Love from your crazy cyber stalker X
Lov3the3vil
2005-02-28 . chapter 19
Awesomeness, dude. Keep the excellent work and update soon. Bye!
Wonderbee31
2005-02-28 . chapter 18
Really good, and interesting to see how X-com handled the problem. Can't wait to see where the story goes next.
Wonderbee31
2005-02-27 . chapter 19
Wow, this was a really good part, and nice to see a relatively happy ending. I wonder what'll happen next, I imagine Nabiki and Ranma will leave their child, Kimiko, with Kasumi and Tofu or omeone else, I couldn't imagine them taking her to the battlezone. If they do, then I think the idiots might take one more shot, though for thier sakes, I hope Ranm and Nabiki finally deliver a lasting and final message to them.
Innortal
2005-02-27 . chapter 19
A good ending. I look forward to the next series, which I assume will be some of the adventures of the Nemesis. Who will be watching Kimiko? I do hope Ranma and Nabiki live through this.

Innortal
TannimU
2005-02-27 . chapter 19
Oh wee! Human greed at its worst. This chapter in the x-com/ranma/whatever crossover was so kewl. I have to admit that I was crying when you had Gunny's husband die for the accountant. The use of Weir and the accountant was exquisite however. They were more than clueless tree-hugging obstacles, you made the characters come alive. Great job! Keep it up!!
Jerry Unipeg
2005-02-26 . chapter 19
GREAT ENDING!
Jerry Unipeg
2005-02-26 . chapter 18
I LOVE THIS CHAPTER! To bad they did not catch him alife.
Innortal
2005-02-26 . chapter 18
Cool, even Weir will have to face the facts now.

Innortal
Jerry Unipeg
2005-02-26 . chapter 17
GREAT CHAPTER! Looks like HELL! is going a hunting.
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