WOW! this was really good! awesome! :)

-Red

I admit, this is actually pretty good. I was worried at first but you made up for it at the end. I cant offer advice on it because in my opinion there is nothing you could have done better

Nice story!

You wrote that for a teacher? Good thing s/he's not homophobic.

I've always been confused by the "you POV" thingamajigaroo, but I liked it anyway!

WOW. SO cute! I like this one too. XD

Sasuke is not gay why don't you people get that dumbasses

Okay, now I totally loved this one! You showed your teacher up with this story! *adds to faves*

Go SasuNaru!

9/10

I really loved it so sweet cinda OC but really sweet.:)

I don't think you've exploited the 'You' POV as much as you could. Some places seem to be lacking commas, and in others the punctuation is a touch confusing to the point where it breaks up the otherwise good flow of the piece. I'd recommend a beta.

The story itself was sort of cute, but it relied (in my mind) too heavily on the usual cliches, instead of utilising them. I think you can do much better, perhaps write slower or come back to it again after a few days before posting it.