Wow. This story just grabbed me and I couldn't stop reading. Literally. Lunch breaks and free time the past two days. Sometimes there was A LOT going on, and keeping track of everyone was a bit daunting. Having familiarity with most of the characters helped. As you have said you have left a lot of room to expand the story even more, and I hope that you do. I look forward to read more or your work.

hehe, i love the moto/kei pairing, nice story

Awesome work. I like the complexity of the story. And i love Mot/Kei fanfics. Your story´s are great.
I hope you continue this.
Best wishes to you.

holy crap! i'm not the oly one that noticed akane and naru are exactly the same!

Excellent fight.

Loved the angel scene and the ending!

-“Bill, I have decided upon my price for assistance.
-I wish for 5 minutes of unsupervised time with this
-boy’s father in a very isolated area...with no medical
-assistance available.” she stated sweetly.

*snicker*

Too bad she's underestimating the sneaky old
bastard. It'd take 10 minutes just to find him
in a room with no exits if he got wind of her
plans.

LOL!

Vash was a nice surprise.

I like the pairings. Or at least the way they seem to be headed.

Hi! I first stumbled across this fic on another site. I immeadiately loved it, but was bitterly dissapointed to find only four chapters. So I was pleased beyond words to find it in it's entirety on this site. As a recent 'Love Hina' convert, this is one of the best fics I have read. And as a growing Kei/Mot fan, I'm still drooling over how you portrayed their relationship. I really can not add more to what I have already said about your body of work, other than to encourage you to keep typing your imagination. Eagerly awaiting your next efforts! T

First, I have to say I love this story...of course I love any story that has a believable Keitaro/Motoko match :) I can fully understand your fixation on the cute kendoka. The characters are believably growing beyond canon. I can easily accept the way they are acting, both due to events and their base canon personalities.

I was a little worried about the appearance of Nagi and the way she was presented. Until the final few sentences, she came across as more of a mercenary than a bounty hunter. To be honest, I'm still a little worried. I'm not certain that she would have accepted a job from a criminal such as Geese. I would have expected her to sense what Geese really was due to her experience hunting similar criminals. Her appearance just seems a little weak. Hopefully she realize she's been duped and turn on Geese, and by extension Drake, soon. I don't think she'll consider a bounty offered by a criminal as a legit contract. After all, those are the types she hunts, including Ryoko (though Ryoko is a reformed pirate, she was still a pirate :p).

Reading on...

This will be the 4th time I've read the whole thing all the way through. No story has ever held my attention like this. I may be doubling up on my reviewing but I don't care. It is fantastic.

just a quick question hear because no oone will answer anywhere else. does anyone know if there is a place near virginia beach, virgina, 23462. where i can learn the southern mantis style martial arts? or any similar style?

i read this story a while back but im not sure if reveiwed or not. my computer broke soon after I finished what was here and only recently did i remember the title.
that aside, i really loved it last time. MOTOKO RULZZ!. lol. anyway. ust wanted to say that you did a good job. just in case i didnt review back then :)

Sorry I've been away so long. I'm still digging it and you really did an excellent job on the physical attacks.

Howdy,

I am SPC Michael Preston. I am in the military and currently overseas. I am one of those guys THAT actually does fight the bad guys on the home turf. And I want to thank you. Your story 'Immortality Sucks' was GREAT. I could what for my missions to end and it was my turn to play on the computer and get online and read your AWESOME story. Really I am a anime freak and I like reading peoples fanfic on my favorite animes ... I LOVE the way you combined all those different characters into the story ... Billiant ... Anyways I just completed it and I just had to write you and congratulate you on a great story. Thanks.