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| JWG 2005-07-06 ch 1,  | abuseGreat start! Looking forward to the adventures you cook up for my favorite clone. As for suggestions, somewhere in the Lost Years publication there was a very oblique reference to Ben's having visited Singapore. Might be worth looking into. And if you ever read the Ranma½ page, check out my story, in which Mr. Reilly doesn't die and spends the next four years training in the martial arts with the Nerima Wrecking Crew. |
| mattb3671 2005-04-04 ch 1, | abusegood start. kinda angsty, but it would be hell to be a clone. check out my little story if you can, you'll like it! THANKS! |
| CobraCommander 2005-03-29 ch 1, | abuseInteresting. I'm actually not a big fan of the whole Clone Saga thing. In fact, that's what drifted me away from the Spider-Man series (but that was okay, because it helped me discover Moon Knight!). However, this is pretty good. I liked how you implemented the old Shakespeare technique of thesis and antithesis. The sentence, "His mind, bright and gifted, was numb and incoherent" is a perfect example. Whether that technique was intentional or not, it was still great. Ben is a strange character, but I like what you're doing with him. Truly, Cobra Commander |
| Ray Battlemonger 2005-03-28 ch 1, | abusei'm not really a big fan of the Scarlet Spider, but this story's off to a good start. I think he should do crime-fighting in Chicago and meet baddies old (like Electro and the Wrecker) and new. Good luck! |
| sma 2005-03-10 ch 1, anon. | abuseI love this story, please continue. You really are in Iraq? Wow. Hopefully you will be back pretty soon. I had a cousin that had to be there 12 months but extended to 15 months but he is home now. Hope you are safe and get out of there soon |
| Proponent of EVO 2005-03-03 ch 1, | abuseOh, ambition in your writing, eh? The Scarlet Spider is a very good character to write about, if only because it is so easy to build upon his personality. I know you'll do a good job of it. Keep it up! PS: I didn't think you were capable of short chapters...heh heh. |
| Champion X 2005-02-22 ch 1, | abusewow wow wow wow...i like it...keep it up, i want to read more. |
| cwslyclgh 2005-02-22 ch 1, anon. | abusesweet, I always liked Ben Riley, and I am sure that you will do an excelent job telling his tale... I can't wait to read further into the story. |