Wow, I mean, wow. I loved it! Especially the...third paragraph to the end. I like the whole "we win, we losr, we die..." thing.

You are an awesome writer! Keep up the good work!

:)

I really love the story! Could you show the race from the rest of the gang's POV? the other runners POV? The coach's and the Collage Rep's POV? If Ponyboy is Hermes(mercury) than who are Darry and soda and steve and two-bit? Who are Johnny and Dallas?

Ponyboy-Mercury(Hermes), the winged messanger [travel, messanger, speed]

Sodapop-Venus(Aphrodite), the bringer of peace [love, peace,beauty]

Dallas-Mars(Ares), the bringer of war [agriculture, war]

Two-bit-Jupiter(Zeus), the bringer of Jollity(humor) [king, humor, fun]

Darry-Adrastea(no alias), the distributer of rewards and punishmets [reward, punishment, responsibility]

Steve-Eris(Discordia), bringer of strife [strife, discord, caos)
OR
steve-Welandus(no alias), elvish smith [smith, builder, fixer, mechanic]

Johnny-Vanth(no alias), guider of lost souls [guide, gentleness, kindness...]

this was really good. great characterization (did i totally make that word up?idk)

This is such an amazing piece. I love the setting - the emotion he conveys with his words - the allegory of Mercury.

Absolutely exquisite. Thank you.

Excellent

Wow, I loved it :]

I bow in respect to a truly awsome story. Not only were the disscriptions wonderful, but it was purely Ponyboy. I loved the insight, and the last line very much.

This is an amazing story. Please write more Outsiders fic!

I loved the image of Ponyboy as Mercury and how his message at the end echoed Johnny's final message in his letter in the book.

Uh. I love that. I really do. you should deffinatly write ore you are gifted.

Wow. Fantastic writing. This was so insightful and well thought out. I can't believe I didn't find this earlier.

Scarlett

"Running to remember that we're alive."

It's been a really long time since I read this book, but this line strikes me as being what they strove for through the whole thing. They just wanted to know they were alive, and that it meant something.

"We're all running, always have been, cutting into the wind and leaving our bright streaks of destruction and rebirth behind."

Such a poetic line. This was a really nice read. You used imagery and Pony's thought process very coherently. It was nice to read something that didn't jar me out of the moment with inconsistencies, typos, or out of place references. Like I said, it's been so long since I read the book, I can't really speak to characterization, but even if I didn't know who Ponyboy was, this would still be a nice little metaphysical thought to come across.

I do hope you invent some of your own characters some day, because it seems to me you have a lot of voices of your own waiting to be discovered.

Good luck.

I'm surprised I hadn't found this before now, this is a great piece! Pony's voice is so authentic and real. I love the contrast between him running and his thoughts. There's a sadness and hope in it that comes through really nicely, great job.

This is really powerful stuff. It's a strong and slightly frightening idea that a whole generation of kids were/are runnig without knowing where they're going and therefore never getting anywhere, but you've added enough small touches of humour (like the whole horse kid thing and darry hiding his ciggies) to make it seem less serious and more simple somehow. I also liked the fact it ends on a positive note, with Pony being offered a possible way out. If anyone deserves a bit of happiness in their life, it's Ponyboy.

That was great. I loved the story and the message. "We win, we lose, we die beneath streetlights and none of it matters because we don't know where we're going"... That line just about summed the greasers up (and it gave me chills!).

Woot! Nice one-shot. The Greek/Roman mythology connection makes a really intriguing fic, especially as we sort of expect Ponyboy to know this stuff better than any of the others we've seen in the Outsiders. :)