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| afta4ever 2008-07-25 ch 9,  | abusethis is probably one of the best stories out there. cant wait to read the rest |
| Kurumi-chan 2008-06-16 ch 9, | abuseAwesome possum!Read the whole fic and I love it> |
| MusicIsLove92 2008-06-10 ch 9, | abuseI absolutely adore your imagination and writing style, not to mention the story itself. Your translation of the characters from DP into the Civil War is amazingly articulate, and really rather accurate. As far as the technical stuff goes, your grammar and word choice are impeccable as well as appropriate, and the placing of the characters (as far as they pertain to the plot) is perfect, or at least in my opinion. The cliffhangers, however unnerving, definitely keep the my attention! Please continue writing, as I look forward to the next chapter. -Carolyn |
| cutereviewgirl 2008-06-07 ch 9, | abuseThis was such a short chapter! And.. is Sam staying there and not going back with danny and stuff..? That's so sad! NO!1 Well, anyways, can't wait for the next UPDATE! -CUTIE |
| rin916 2008-06-07 ch 9, | abuseOK first of all you are an aswome writter. It had good flow it is still intresting ( i was so happy to get the email that you had another update on this story.) I enjoyed reading it. |
| Dancos 2008-06-07 ch 9, | abuseFinally Sam meets Jazz but she doesn't know that she is Danny's sister.^^ Interesting things will happen because of this, right? I looking forward to the next chapter and I hope that you'll update it soon. |
| YouHitMyHeart101 2008-06-06 ch 9, | abuseAwesome chapter it was really good !! I hope Danny's ok I feel so bad for him. Yay Sam's starting to become a hospital nurse. Anyway I hope their is some romance between Danny and Sam maybe a kiss hehe !! :) please update soon ASAP I'm so excited for the next chapter I'm going crazy haha. |
| 2wingo 2008-06-06 ch 9, | abuse1.) Smooth enough to be easy reading, but choppy enough to seem realistic. 2.) I'd like to see some expansion of Jed Ravenstorm (wink,wink). 3.) Nope. 4.) No, it tantalized with new facts. 5.) Still interesting. 6.) I'd like to see Danny become a half-ghost soon. Also, maybe Vlad should be some sort of Confederate general, or better yet, a Yankee businessman who's secretly working for the South. |
| xxxGothic Angelxxx 2008-05-31 ch 8, | abuseIloved the story! |
| Sedentary Wordsmith 2008-05-29 ch 8, | abuseWonderful! I'm so happy you updated. Not long ago I was reading through my favorites and came across this one and reread it. It's certainly been a while. The only question of yours I have a comment on is number three. The word flow was a bit repetitive in some areas. Just an example: near the end, you said Danny "shook his head, trying to clear his head" when you could have just replaced the second "head" for "it." Just little stuff like that, that would make it easier to read. That's it for the technical stuff. As far as the plot goes, it's still interesting! Most definitely. You still have all your readers on the edges of our seats, wondering what will happen next. Aw, that was sad about Valerie and Tucker. Val is going to be especially sad when she finds out the truth, not to mention mad that Danny didn't tell her when she asked. Excellent plot twist. Didn't see it coming at all. Anyway, keep it up. I'm excited to see how this ends. -Word (previously known as dPhantoMfreak...who hasn't reviewed since chapter 5. Sorry.) |
| SiLvEr StRiPs 2008-05-27 ch 8, | abuseomg you updated! I love this story and hope to see later chapters soon! I think it's going great so far! I wonder whom else was watching...Hm... |
| cutereviewgirl 2008-05-26 ch 8, | abuse1. Good good. 2. I think they're fine, not that wooden, but you can't so much in this type of plot either i don't think.. 3. Good. 4. Nope. 5. Interesting as HECK! 6. I think you should update more, because I forgot just about the whole thing when I read this chapter =D, so.. but update your other great stories as well!! They're all awesome! UPDATE! -CUTIE |
| YouHitMyHeart101 2008-05-26 ch 8, | abuseAwesome chapter !! Aw Danny is so cute and so protective of Sam :) Well duh they're in love with each other hehe. Valerie was nice to help them. Oh man I hope Dash doesn't find them or one of his soldiers. I hope you update real soon because this story is killing me. And I need to know what's gonna happen next !! :) |
| ghostanimal 2008-05-26 ch 8, | abuseAwsome chappie! |
| Dancos 2008-05-26 ch 8, | abuseThis story is just great I'm so happy that you finally updated it |