Great chapter and story so fair pleaces continue the story soon.

Back in one of the early chapters you give a warning about it supposedly being dark. Well the warning doesn't quite fit but it does help allow the right mood for when Nabiki is dressing down Soun.

I like what you have in the fic so far and I hope that all the time since your last chapter doesn't mean you've given up on it. But as far as ideas for how the story is progressing you ended this shopping trip at the mall passing up a golden opportunity to get the secrets into the open.

Usagi + Ranma + Ice Cream almost screams that Ranma-chan should make an appearance. Think of it this way. Usagi is always a klutz then add in Minako and Makoto have also had their less than graceful moments when ogling a cute guy. Now add in that at an ice cream concession you have cold drinks cold food and rarely ever have anything hot aside from the Fudge topping. Add that all together how can you pass up the chance for even say Mina getting the bright idea to spill her soda so she can clean it up from his lap and check out the package?

Not to mention Ranma's whole Ice cream Tastes better as a girl schtik It comes up more than once. And could you imagine Usagi and Ranma-chan double teaming for treats? There's a fic out there where Ranma-chan and Hild do that and well it was amazingly done. And ever since I saw that I couldn't help but wonder what would happen if it had been Meatballhead.

The contraction of 'you' and 'are' is "you're". The word "your" denotes possesion.

Good fic, minus the geographical and cannonical errors. Nice job.

I have a problem with this battle. I know this is after the failed wedding. therefore, Ranma has already killed Saffron. what i'm not seeing is the brilliant martial artist that he is. Where is the uber Ki-slinging, God-slaying, grandmaster-pounding artist of the martial aspect we all know? Cause you appearing to have also forgotten about the Yamasenken, which could have destroyed the monster. but, this is your story, so i shall complain no more.

I like this story sofar. Keep up the good work, cause i would like to read more of it.

Heya Kat. Thanks for the fic. It's an interesting piece of work. First, let's get the gripes out of the way.

Your grammar isn't anywhere near as poor as some other fics which I've read, or at least attempted to read. That being said, your grammar could still use a bit of a touch up. My advice would be for you to find a prereader who's also good at editing.

The story, itself, is great. The plot line appears to be solid and has my head bumping different little theories around.

The one complaint I'll make about Ranma is with what happened in your previous chapter (chapter 9, if you don't count the prologue as a separate chapter).

Now, Ranma one half leaves itself open to a LOT of interpretation. That's why you see fics with nice Nabikis and mean ones, abusive Akanes and sweet ones, smart Ranmas and idiotic ones. That being said, a whiny Ranma seems to need quite a bit to actually whine as much as he appeared to do, and 10-15 minutes of walking would hardly suffice. Shoot, he even grew up on the road. Could you imagine Genma's response if Ranma was constantly asking "Are we there yet?" It probably wouldn't be pretty...

Well, that's it for now. Thanks for the fic, and I certainly look forward to reading more. ^^

very kewl

Here Kitty Kitty

Sorry, couldn't help it. Well You did it again. Yet another story to keep me coming back for more. I'd like to just how Nabiki and Ranma would fit in to the Senshi universe and how you plan on pairing them up. I'll be looking forward to this and your other work in progres.

Your Diligent Reader
Jhayrelle

sweet

Hey if you are looking for someone to bounce ideas off or pre-read just let me know, I will be more then happy to help out.

btw good chapter.

A bit choppy in parts, but pretty good overall. The setup to get Nabiki and Ranma to Juban seemed a little forced. Still, I'm curious to see how this turns out.

I've always enjoyed your stories. You've got a lot of potential for this story. Still have me guessing on which one of the girls is the reborn princess, though most likely it's Nabiki, at least I'm hoping so. I've never really liked seeing Ranma as a reincarnated FEMALE soul. It just never really makes sense to me.

Anyway, I like the mystery that you keep around the opposition. It makes for an interesting read and I'm looking forward to when you finally reveal the secrets from the past. We already know that some people know what's going on. Looking forward to how you set it up.

And don't worry about the characters being too OOC. This is fan fiction and I think you've got a lot of the core personality still intact on all your characters.

If you're still looking for a sounding board for your ideas, I'm always available to bounce things off of.

Finally an update.
I really like this story.
The meeting with the complete inner Senshi was fun.
So I want to know how this continues.
I'm waiting for the next chapters.
Mit freundlichem Gruss
Shaithan

it is a good story to read and wonder what happens to ranma about her looking the like the lost princess.

Poor Ranma, this just isn't his day. First he angers Ami's mother, now he's stuck in the mall with a bunch of girls, and I wouldn't be surprised if a monster attacked the mall.