No criticism to offer, only compliments. This is a very excellent piece of work. Beautiful in its style and execution - I love the otherworldy aspect of thought to it, weaving in mentions of the soul and cultural customs, and scents and feelings of nature. Very effective. I'm not even entirely, 100 percent sure what this oneshot was trying to say, beyond Riza's contemplations and the relationship between her and Roy, but it's almost intangible to me, feels like it might be there, but I don't even know if I'm supposed to reach for it. Because it's meant to be past comprehension, like some ancient piece of artwork, just something lovely to enjoy but its meaning isn't necessary... I don't know. But this was very nice.

I don't have any other words to say except these: I am SO very glad I stumbled across this piece! It made my day!

Thank you VERY much!

Awesome narrative. You brought out the inconspicuous yet understanding relationship between Riza and Roy. I adore the imageries, and I especially liked this one: "Sir…?" she asked carefully, because although she'd done her level best to defuse the time bomb that was Roy Mustang, one could never quite be sure of the outcome until it announced its wellness or blew up in one's face." Great.

Haha, I had to look up so many words from this story. You helped me learn new vocabularies :P

Excellent story. I'm looking forward to reading more of your works.

:)

Critiscism? How can you criticize something that's so well written?

Do you know how long I've been looking for a well-written Royai? A long time, no doubt. So thank you for writing something so wonderfully in-character and grammatically correct.

absolutely spectacular.

This was... superb.

There was so much hidden, untapped emotion in the underlinings of this fic, but your style was overflowing with big words and unspoken emotion, all too characteristic of Roy and Riza. It wasn't overly emotional, and it was lacking enough to keep us wanting more. Great job.

This is so beautifully written, and I really think that you captured the true essence of Roy and Riza's relationship. Well done! :3

Beautiful, absolutely gorgeous. I love how this fic is mostly a series of interwoven analogies and metaphors that so clearly depicts their relationship and their characters. It's very deep, very moving, and altogether well written. Good job.

"Any moment, she expected him to come to his senses, to pull away from her and be a fingersnap away from being Roy Mustang again, and not some… penitent beggar asking for forgiveness from a source he could no longer see." Beautiful. :)

Wow. That was very good. You captured the essence of their relationship wonderfully. Thank you for the good read.

cute...really cute. Roy was described really well! ANd the slight hints of roy/riza are so nicely done! I love it!

Awe, that was cute.

All I can say is.. wow! You did an excellent job capturing both Roy's and Risa's personalities, and the piece flowed so naturally, layered with intricate descriptions, and wonderfully clothed in words. One of the best works I have read to date.

There aren't a lot of turns of phrase that can make me sigh like a schoolgirl but I do believe "because they weren't overly fond of saying things that needed words" did just that.

This fic is everything I have never known I wanted out of Roy/Riza.

Thank you.

M...You've got a lot of deep vocab there haha:) interesting...

It's quite difficult to portray Roy Mustang as someone who is, at times, weak inside, broken and needy...And yet is still able to put up his signature coy, arrogant smirk on the exterior. You made that happen. I applaud you for that :P

That's all...Hope to hear more from yah!

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