absolutely spectacular.

This was... superb.
There was so much hidden, untapped emotion in the underlinings of this fic, but your style was overflowing with big words and unspoken emotion, all too characteristic of Roy and Riza. It wasn't overly emotional, and it was lacking enough to keep us wanting more. Great job.

This is so beautifully written, and I really think that you captured the true essence of Roy and Riza's relationship. Well done! :3

Beautiful, absolutely gorgeous. I love how this fic is mostly a series of interwoven analogies and metaphors that so clearly depicts their relationship and their characters. It's very deep, very moving, and altogether well written. Good job.

"Any moment, she expected him to come to his senses, to pull away from her and be a fingersnap away from being Roy Mustang again, and not some… penitent beggar asking for forgiveness from a source he could no longer see." Beautiful. :)

Wow. That was very good. You captured the essence of their relationship wonderfully. Thank you for the good read.

cute...really cute. Roy was described really well! ANd the slight hints of roy/riza are so nicely done! I love it!

Awe, that was cute.

All I can say is.. wow! You did an excellent job capturing both Roy's and Risa's personalities, and the piece flowed so naturally, layered with intricate descriptions, and wonderfully clothed in words. One of the best works I have read to date.

There aren't a lot of turns of phrase that can make me sigh like a schoolgirl but I do believe "because they weren't overly fond of saying things that needed words" did just that.
This fic is everything I have never known I wanted out of Roy/Riza.
Thank you.

M...You've got a lot of deep vocab there haha:) interesting...

It's quite difficult to portray Roy Mustang as someone who is, at times, weak inside, broken and needy...And yet is still able to put up his signature coy, arrogant smirk on the exterior. You made that happen. I applaud you for that :P

That's all...Hope to hear more from yah!

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A gorgeous, lyrical piece! You have a lot of intricacy here, layers intermeshed that build on each other from a psychological standpoint and really make these two characters come alive. And although I've only made it to episode 24 in the series and haven't read the manga, it's really wonderful that you've tapped into all the subtleties that canon gives us, built on them and made something even better and more intense. Because Riza's caring is there as is the heart hiding beneath Mustang's stone-faced demeanor. Thanks for writing and posting and I hope you write more about these two! :)

For an extemporaneous un-beta'd plot bunny, you're amazingly articulate! I could see everything, and even know the feeling she had when cleaning her weapon (it's the same one you get when you write something this well after being up all night, without the guilt of having to go to work the next day). I'm going to check out more of your works!

I love it! It really captures Riza's personality -- too many people try to make her internalize everything and be emotional when she's really a very practical person.

Ah...that was so relaxingly beautiful. Your writing is so very lyrical and expressive. Ah...*sighs*

Wow. That. Was. Gorgeous. So beautifully written, it was almost like poetry. I especially liked: "...And the whole world came crashing to technicolor." And "Riza remembered why she loved the rain." Beautiful! Awesome!

Ciao!