no, i don't agree with you- it was a good story! i liked it. you say you made up the story yourself? wow, that's cool.

I like it, but I'm kind of a morose person, so...

omg..that's so sad! I'm actually cring!

aww...this is so sad...but good...very good

i thought your story was really good. a bit depressing but good. i liked it alot.

urs truley,

lpp

yo, this is Amni[ diff. user from above]. I really liked your poem and short story about Lily. nice work transferring the data from Rowling's work to match your work. Keep writing and best wishes.

Amidala Potter

Nah, we knew it was Lily's POV. Good stuff.

Good job.

The poem fit the story.

It all flowed naturally. _

wow thats..deep.

That's really sweet. I think it's really sad, but inspiring too.

Wow, that WAS really depressing... I like the last little bit - very good way of describing Avada Kedavra. Very, very well-written. I loved it! Keep writing, you're a good author! MM&I