Hey :)
Just noticed that I´ve never reviewed this story before. I must have read it about 4 times already, and I was convinced that I already left a review... so much for my memory >.<
Anyway, this one-shot is one of the few Lily/James stories I really enjoxed reading. I usually don´t like the pairing, but when an author has a style that I like, I don´t really care about the main characters.
Your mix of present and past was just right, I think. The short part at the beginning, then the sudden beginning of the scene in the library, and then back to the present... it was kind of structured like a short story, with just one particular glimpse into the everyday life of the Marauders back when they were in school.
Anyway, I really like the atmosphere in this one, it was the right mix of humor and sadness. The parts at the beginning and the ending somewhat contrast with the funny, sometimes hilarious parts in the middle, which I really liked.

I can´t even begin to list all the parts that made me laugh out loud, there were just too many of them. For example, this one:

“Do you think,” she repeated patiently, keeping her voice low, “that you and I will have a happy ending?”

Good god in heaven! Was she talking about marriage? XD

Remus´ dry sense of humor is just hilarious :D You really got his personality right, even if he acts as immature as Sirius at the end (but as you already stated, they are just teenagers in this story ;))

Here are just some of my fav. scenes:

1. “You have to,” Peter continued, almost like a little boy slowly but surely analysing a very difficult math problem. “Because we’ve let her into our group. She knows most of our secrets. And you comb your hair for her. You must love her.”

2. “Don’t accuse James of reading! I bet you do it all the time, fiend,” he accused Remus with a disgusted sneer.

3. He should have felt relieved. He should have been able to finish his meal in blessed peace. No marriage. She had no urge whatsoever to sway him to the dark side. Lily Evans was possibly the only girl in school who did not want to drag her boyfriend to the altar, and her boyfriend happened to be particularly anti-altar. This was good. This was okay. He could live with this.

“Why the bloody hell don’t you want to marry me?” he suddenly exploded, causing a startled Sirius to choke on his crisps.

This one is just pure genius :D I love the way James gets all worked up about this... pretenting that it´s okay, and then his sudden outburst... I chuckled evertime when reading this.

The ending made me sad, it connects the two parts about the present really well.
All in all, it was both very amusing and saddening to read of James´ and Lily´s fate.
Keep up your writing! :)

greets

This is wonderful! I loved how you wrote the characters, particularly Wormtail. I have a love of banter, so I really enjoyed reading it. I thought that the memory/reality parts clashed nicely, but could have had less of the memory, more of the present. Actually, I don't think that, and liked that it was more lighthearted. But I think it would have been more emotionally intense had there been less memory. Of course, it would depend on what effect you wnated...either way, great writing!

Equally heartbreaking and hilarious, which isn't easy. I simply have nothing to say, apart from how much I love this and how well I think James has been portrayed. Well done :)

beautifully done, really good piece of writing!!

xmosesx

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Painfully beautiful. :)

The story is amazing. I loved the banter between the Marauders. But isn't Lily older then James?

I believe you have captured your goal in one sad but maurauderingly funny and brilliant most definitely brilliant good job...and yes I am aware that more than likely mauauderingly is not a word!

Wow... that was... simply amazing. I really really really adored this. There wasn't a time when I was not chortling or sighing. It was beautiful.

The introduction and the ending are nice, but they seem kind of ... detatched from the rest of this happy, sweet fic. I wouldn't say that it was a mistake to have it in here, but maybe you could smooth the transition a bit more.

Great job!

Nice! A very nice one-shot indeed. Certain parts are nothing but hilarious and the ending is bitter-sweet.

Thanks for giving the opportunity to read this story.

To be honest, one word will fully describe your story. It was none other than beautiful. It was a great combination of wit, humor and a wondrous creativity that caused me to laugh my heart out and feel a tinge of sadness in the beginning and the end. It was brilliantly written.

I agree with the review below me that this story deserves more reviews than the shallow fluff filled stories that fall nothing short but stereotypical. Your originality is really amazing.

Thank you for sharing with us this story!

That was simply... beautiful.

And what surprises me more is that this story doesn't have the amount of reviews it deserves! Isn't it simply disgusting how the not-so well written stories with a lot of overdone fluff tend to get the most reviews? Quite unfair, if you ask me. All in all though, you can rest well assured that this story had managed to make me feel a mix of emotions. Happiness, laughter, and of course, melancholy.

Beautiful beginning. Beautiful middle. Beautiful ending.
Keep up the great work!

awesome story! i loved the banter between the maruaders and james and lily! it was so hilarious and well written! and i shared it with my friend and she said that it totally made her day- so great job!

OMG!
SO FUNY
** MY PANTS AT THE TALKING BUSHES PART
FREAKIN HILARIOUS
KEEP WRITING!

brilliant...

its amazing how authors like you manage to turn something pointless - end on a most heart-warming note...

even though the majority of this story was pretty much pointless (really, talking about not wanting to get married, when everyone knows they do anyway) it was amusing with the spying and the witty comments. the beginning and the end were really well written too. nice work.