cool chapter

Nice. Its lke a crossover with inuyasha and naruto

IT...WAS...AWESOME
although it could handle some detailed lovemaking still good stuff

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I liked the orochi in this chapter, though i think you should have killed him with amataratsu and or tsukioymi, like in the ledgends.

This was a very original chapter. It was good, the way you overcame Lee's lack of chakra by making him a hanoyu. Though i think hinata should have had a water affinity, the fact that she is now more into pheonix jutsus, should have given her more of fire or wind attribute. Also why did Naruto's simply split if his chakra showed both fire and wind, it should have split and burned.


p.s. Lee's spinal injuries where from Gaara, not the inner gates. Except for minor damage openeing any gate but the gate of death, is relativly harmless. Lee has opend 6 gates without serious conciquences.

I liked this chapter , and i liked that you included a dracolich in it as well. I would however like to point out two minor mistakes you used with the dracolich, one a blue dracolich can not use a cone of cold, or blow air cold enough to make steam from a fire jutsu. Also with the line of electrcity, there is no build up to show when it is used. The dragon simply spits out electricital energy that it has absorbed. I think it would have been better had you used a red dracolich, as it would have been immune to her foxfire as well.

This was a good chapter. However you seem to be mistaken on something. The shunshin is not the 4th signature move, it is a chunin level technique that most ninja use. the 4th is caled the yellow flash because of his Hiraishin no Jutsu, that he can use to move much faster than shunshin. Naruto, hanoyu or not would not beable to master both of his fathers signature techniques in one month.

Good chapter, though a hokage reading the paper would still beable to avoid a son sized projectile, and you should teach akumaru to talk,
also give Gishou the ability to transform/ or the ability to fly and have him hang around with a speedy hedgehog.

DarkGaara: No you would not, she could easily eat you up.
What was DarkGaara's comment? The answer sounds interesting.

I like this story so far, I am not an expert on either naruto any other manga/anime but it seems good so far.
some things i would like to point out though, the Shuriken Kage Bunshin no Jutsu, does NOT require any type of kekkei genkai, it is just another version of the Kage Bunshin. It may or may not have been a frobidden, like the kage bunshin, but that would be because it needs a lot of chakra.

I am EXTREMELY happy that I found this fic. Normally, I only like Hanyou-NaruHina fics that are rated M, because of the fact that you get to read about the Hanyou courtship rituals and mating, but, I must say, the courtship, mating, and kit-birth minus the lemons should be great, too, as long as there's a good amount of fluff!

Keep up the good work, my friend!

Excellent story. The OCs were wonderful and the canon characters were all IC as far as the storyline went (i.e. Sasuke not being completely obsessed with killing Itachi due to his being taken in by the Uzumaki's).
The one thing that bugged me was Ken's name, but I'm guessing that you started out the fic without a name for the Yondaime and once his true name was revealed, you just kept going with Ken. No biggie; just one of the things that made me twitch at the beginning of the story.
I liked the way you made the Elemental Nations as a separate section of Earth that is simply hidden away, thus allowing you to build off of the current storyline and merge it with your other fic's storyline.
This story has actually given me a bit of inspiration for my own story, and once I figure out a few things I'll be contacting you in regards to certain things. ^_^
The one thing I noticed throughout your story was the usage of 'sennin' and 'Sannin' in improper places. At times you would be referring to Orochimaru or Tsunade as one of the 'Legendary Three' and call them 'Sennin' instead of 'Sannin'. Other than that, I wasn't able to spot any other faults that couldn't be fixed by a little rewording.
Once again, Naruto The Kitsue Hanyou was an excellent fic and I'm looking forward to reading Hanyou Trials! Keep up the outstanding work!

~Jolly

This has been a most interesting and enjoyable story to read. I look forward to reading more from you.

great fic

Hey! this is currently the best story i've read since the Fox knight by leaf ranger. It's really good and helped me start writing. Thanks and keep writing. They're good.