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Interesting little thing you have here. Seduction and undercover missions are always an interesting read, and while hearing of a six-year-old Kakashi having to murder a man after being 'dirtied' by another at such a young age...it's heartbreaking. In all, this is very well constructed, and I absolutely adore the repetitive nature of being six, being cold, and the idea of tying shoelaces. It makes the story seem childlike like Kakashi SHOULD be and yet so eeriely mature like Kakashi IS. This is a wonderful story! So Happy Holidays and thank you for the excellent read!

Ja ne!
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Frankly, I loved it. Your style of writing got me hooked almost immediately, I was enthralled in the way you got into the mindset of both a six year old child, and a shonbi, and then continued to perfectly meld the two persona together. It was simply ingenious.

This is going to be favourited, I assure you. Many thanks for such an enthralling read.

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Wow. This was excellent. I liked your portrayal of Kakashi's thought process and his reasoning. That last sentence was such a sucker-punch. Thanks for sharing.

Wow. That was fantastic, truly and completely fantastic. I love the little tie ins about him being able to tie his shoes (the ending was perfect) and holy crap. I am stunned and really happy to have read this. Great job, poor Kakashi, but the fact that he is so numb to it was just wow

I like that you don't belabor the point of this, wringing the rag of my emotions for every drop of pathos you can get. Don't get me wrong, it's a worthy topic and you wrote it well, but I'm glad you stopped here.

that was good

Oh such good mind**! Wholesomely twisted yet painfully real, the ending was fabulous with the different reactions.

Oh, man, that is so, so perfect, and I totally believe that it happened.

Oh wow. I read this for the first time ages ago, and I didn't add it to my Favorites for some reason - maybe instantaneous computer failure, I don't know. I've been searching for it ever since, and I'm so glad I found it again. I love the final line, and the entire situation is just gorgeously painful. The repetition of the shoe laces is lovely as well. Excellent work.

I wanna cry, that is just so sad!

This story is so sad (and kimi no vanilla's 'squeal' on top of this makes it more sad, as Kakashi doesn't seem to fully understand what was going on but the people who send him do...)
And even though he was striped of his innocence at such a young age, he seemed to hold on a small portion of it

'Kakashi stared at the body for a long time, and puzzled. It took very little to kill a man. One lucky hit, one chance blow. The strongest man could be taken down by a mere whim of lady luck. The weakest could be the one to land that blow.
Kakashi was six, and he concluded that life made no sense.'

That especially made me feel like crying...

That was amazing. Kakashi's point of view on how he first killed was written wonderfully well. And he was only six! But I love how at the end, he tied his shoelaces. ^^ Great job!

Wow, very well written. It took my breath away at how well it was done. Nice work, definitely a favorite.

This was good. I read the unofficial sequel/prequel/whatever to this... can't remember the title... so I was excepting a long, epic length story. I'm glad it's a oneshot. I haven't had the patience to read a long story lately. Anyway, good job, I like it, even if it was depressing.

This is haunting. I love how you used the language in it, used Kakashi's stark thoughts to help illustrate the bleakness in the whole story -- to understate the horror by keeping it in a childs POV... really this is brilliant but still haunting.