Incredibly great story! Really was impressed all the way through!
Don't understand that last part in the last chapter here all that much, but figure it is something you put in yourself.

I love this story so much. I can't wait to find out what happens to Mical. he's the type that would be crushed by mistake of falling to the dark side. As for Sarii and Revan's brother... I'm curious to see more to see more of them together.

Poor Atton. Sarii's found another guy so quickly.

This chapter is foreboding. I was really upset that Atton died last chapter but I didn't realize it was going to have bad long-term consequences for Sarii. I don't see the Exile rebounding from his loss quickly. She still has her Padawan, but he feel to the darkside fairly easily and now without her lover... She's in a really emotionally fragile state. I'm worried about her.

I kind of like the way your wrote Revan in this chapter as selfish and somewhat unrepentent. I like seeing her with the hint of fierceness she needed to be a Sith Lord.

She's over her guilt, but Sarii is obviously not ovr hers.

Really, really good chapter. I felt every emotion that Sarii felt. I felt her loss and disbelief.

Aw, Tova sneaking under the barrier and jumping at Dustil is TOTAL love!

Hahaha. And their banter is SOCUTE. I love them so much. I love Dustil's exclusive offer. Oh that was so what I needed after the last three chapters.

Ahaha and Dustil telling the marriage thing and then Jolee laughing, I love him on the Council.

Ahaha, and I LOVE the ending (once I remembered who he was). So amazing. Great way to wrap everything up.

I still want more, but this settles me for the moment.

O I'm glad there's more Sarii and Revan conflict other than the anti-climatic awesomeness that happened before. This line especially - Revan looked stricken for a second, like she was a mouthy kid who hadn’t been expecting a well-deserved smack across the face. - was really smart and I really pictured her exact expression.

Aww on the last line for this chapter. I really like the conflict between Sarii and Katrina, because you disagree and want to hit both of them and then simultaneously want to hug and agree with both of them. It was very well done.

O, I love the use of Carth as the POV so that he can tell where Sila is and see all the wrong reactions of Dustil and Katrina.

Gak and all these scene changes are driving me crazy with the tension!

Ahaha and I love your Mira. Twenty-six ribs. That's hilarious and sassy.

Aww and the Atton scene breaks my heart, seriously. Sarii's just so closed off and kind of paranoid about any kind of affection and Atton's so bruised from his own activities that he really doesn't put as much out there in the normal sense.

Aww and the Dustil/Carth scene. Oh man, stop making me cry, woman!

Seriously this: Dustil snorted. “What do I need one of those for when I’ve got my father, Admiral Onasi, following me around?” - is like three seconds away from making me bawl, I am holding my jaw so tightly right now so I won't.

Oh god and Dustil just called him Dad. I'm-- you are a horrible person. I'm really tearing up now.

The Obsidian dialog is atrocious and kind of detracts when I'm reading, but I think Katrina's memories of Dustil as her Padawan make up for it. That made me grin like an idiot. It also makes me want to reread your other stories again.

And it almost saves it that he was faking it, yay.

And Atton's deference. I busted a gut, that was hilarious.

The snide sneer that Atton had always known Mical’s vocal cords were capable of had now taken over the Jedi’s speech. - is such an amazing line, I really like all the implications of that.

O. And I really love the description of how his eyes are kind of iced over and sharp. That's really good. It's one of those things that's so good, I'm mad I didn't think of it first.

I like snappy Revan. There's a good rythm to that scene, it really follows a good visual beat with Sarii and Mira deciding to leave and the unseen conversation with a ** off Revan and Carth.

I'm glad Carth talked Kat out of it, but it's kind of depressing with the thought that Celyn could lose both her parents in one day.

TOVA AND MEKEL IN THE SAME ROOM! I am dying of joy for this right now, for serious!

I love that Dustil's friends and fiance are both checking up on his little sister it's got the perfect mix of Dustil influence and big brother Dustil plus the awesomeness of the two people you picked that just rocks.

And oh man that whole scene where Celyn sees it, you instantly feel for Carth and really want to strangle him. It works really well.

Oh god, Dustil way to give it to your father lightly. I love Carth's stubborn attention in the situation, which kind of requires him ignoring any real logic to push through, but it's awesome anyway.

Aww, I love Dustil knowing that Carth is thinking about Morgana. I almost teared up about it. Carth is so emotional and crazy for this job, but we love him for that reason. And the people that love him are so not as heart on their sleeve. Damn ex-Sith.

I can't remember, since it's been so long, but just the image of Carth killing Morgana in front of Dustil's eyes, youch. Really knocked it back into the heart there.

Oh god and this line - His son cleared his throat, running his hand back through his hair to hide a quick pass at his eyes. - almost killed me, for serious.

I can't pick and choose from the droid conversation, because honestly that entire scene is gold. Sarii's offhanded comments and Dustil fixing the droid and Atton's comments about ship crashing are hilarious.

And I love T3 and T3 and Dustil, they are so funny and cute. I love that droid, dammit.

Oh and Dustil losing all color his face is SO FOREBODING.

I loved it. You handled the action really well. It's hard to translate action scenes which are so visual onto the written page but you did a great job. I could picture the battle between Sila, Carth, Dustil, and Revan in my head. I loved that Carth had to wield a lightsaber, it's a real testament to how hard Sila was to fight.

Is Atton really dead? I can't believe you killed him off. It gives the battle gravity, but I hate to see him die.

As always, I love your writing. Please continue.

As much as I hate that you killed off Atton, you really did a great job on this whole chapter. Your battle sequences are excellent and I like the resolution of conflict between Carth and Dustil.

So.. that being said, is it wrong to hope that Atton's death is the darkside playing tricks on Sarii? I mean, you *did* say repeatedly that they shouldn't believe everything they see in there, right? So.. you know, if you get second thoughts about having killed him off you could always do a "Dallas" and bring him back next chapter, right? aw, c'mon... :(

I love the way you've written the True Sith and the mind games they play on our heros. It works really well for the story.

The plot twist of having Dustil's insanity be all an act was really cool. I kind of had a feeling Mical would turn.

Another great chapter. I love dark-sided Mical, it's so cool! :D

Wow, this chapter really touched my heart. It was so hard to watch Carth have come all this way to find Revan and when he finally finds her he can't be sure she's still the Katrina he loves. And the Sith have twisted her. They twisted her sense of hope, so that she's ready to go in and fight the head Sith on her own.

My favorite part is when Carth talks about his promise to protect her. It harkened back to original game play and tied the whole story together.

Very touching chapter.