so not only did she go behind his back telling the twins his past secrets, she also likes to play a game with his emotions? how nice of her.

Hey I love this story quite a bit. Plz continue and maybe jump and do the LOTR story line as well. Plz update soon

A good chapter, keep it up.

I'm really enjoying this fic. It's a different approach to the HP/LOTR crossover. keep up the good work :~)

I'm really enjoying this fic. It's a different approach to the HP/LOTR crossover. keep up the good work :~)

Seems a decent start to a story. Glad he has a little remorse but didn't go all weepy and emo for killing a wife/child abusing bastard.

The song killed the mood. I was thinking "Wtf is this?.. is Harry reading Petunias thoughts.." I was to distracted wondering wtf these random words were to pay attention to the the real story.

“ Ironically it is called hero” he replied.

“ Why is it ironic”, “ because the song was about a hero”, “Oh”.

Eh? that's not ironic...
It'd be ironic if it was about a coward or similar, it's fitting for the name to be what it's about, not ironic.

Still, it's ok so far, you need to work on your grammar though.

I thought I'd review to tell you that there is no way I could possibly read on. This was written as though by an infant. Good effort and commendations for trying, but I don't have the patience for it. There are too many grammatical mistakes, not to mention spelling mistakes. I have listed some below:

"Five years had passed since that faithful night Hagrid had told him the truth..."
-- The word you're looking for is FATEFUL, not faithful. A night cannot be faithful.

"Oh, they treated him humanly or as close to humanly that they could stomach ‘ for the likes of him’ they just kept him hidden."
-- There needs to be a pause in this sentence. Perhaps after 'for the likes of him', you should place a semi-colon or even a full stop.

"Harry... did push ups while doing a handstand."
-- This is very cliche and insignificant. He doesn't need to be Jean Claude Van Damme. Lame.

"He walked across the hard wood floor to his desk Hedwig fluttered to rest atop of her cage while Harry set the packages down on his desk."
-- Again, you need a pause. Put a full stop after the word "desk" and before "Hedwig".

"Dear,

Harry this is the..."

-- When writing letters, it should start with "Dear [Person]," and then you go onto the next paragraph. Not "Dear, " with the name on the next paragraph. Have you never written a letter before?

" It dropt a book unto his bed..."
-- This should read: "It DROPPED a book ONTO his bed".

"... and flew out the window from wince it came."
-- WINCE?!? I think you mean WHENCE, but still, you're using words that don't fit into the flow of the rest of your story. You could easily just say "and flew swiftly out the window again". You're trying to hard.

"Emblazed in muted blue on the cover..."
-- The word you're looking for is "EMBLAZONED". Unless the title is actually on fire... and a muted blue fire at that.

"Ancient Magic’s basic in the skills of Magic controlled by Will power Alone."
-- What an atrocious title for a book. It doesn't make any sense. Is it supposed to be "Ancient Magic: The basic skills of Will-Power magics"? or something to that effect. I don't know what 'basic in the skills' is supposed to mean.

"Inside the front cover was a memento from Mad eye Moody. It said: You’ll be needing this boy."
-- Harry will be needing a boy? Is he gay? Which boy? He says "this boy" but he doesn't specify which one. I think you meant: "You'll be needing this, boy". See how commas and full stops are important in this silly little language called 'English'?

"Constant vigilance Potter constant vigilance always remember that."
-- Again... Grammar! This should read: "Constant vigilance, Potter. Constant Vigilance! Always remember that."
Unless of course Mad Eye is the one with the terrible grammatical skills.

"always remember that. Harry looked at the book excitedly."
-- There is no transition between Mad-Eye's letter and the story itself. At least start a new paragraph. In future, if there is a piece of writing in the story that is not part of the narration, make sure you italicise it.

The only part of this chapter that I enjoyed was this bit:

"When the mammoth pig that was Harry’s uncle burst..."
haha! Mammoth pig!

That's all for now. I could put more, but basically, just remember that you need to work on your grammatical skills. At least get someone to proof-read it for you. That's what betas are for!

Hurry up with the story will you!

Update!

Very good story, I have been reading it from the very start. I do have to ask, why have any pairings at all? He fell in love and yet she died...perfect set up for a non pairing story.

On a bit of a heavier note, I'm afraid I might have to join Tobang with the slash stories. Maybe you could split this story in two, have the slash version and the nonslash version. That way you can humor both ends so to speak. As to why I suggest this, I am a strait guy and as you might imagine don't want to read alot of slash.

Well I'm glad that you have taken your time to read this. Please contact me if you have any questions or if you want to rant to me.

I don't think you understand Tobang's point. Most people hate slash on principle, regardless of quality and whether immortality justifiably fosters a desire for butt secks or not.

I'm not particularly attached to the story though, so I guess that's it, in lieu of an absence of incentives to continue reading.

Good luck with your story.

Very nice! I hope you write more soon!

Wow, finally, I was about to give up hope that this story would be updated again. This chapter felt so short but I hope that you get to update again soon. Thanks for this chapter though. ^_^

Yay *cheers* thankyouthankyouthankyou for the awesome update!! I'm so happy that you updated xD. Loved this chapter!! Great work with characters =] hehe. And the parallels between the two worlds... Snape and Legolas xD. Keep up the awesome writing! Can't wait to read more!!

Hope Legolas gets over his dislike of Estel soon. Who is attacking? Good work as always.