seems interesting! please do continue!

Please update as soon as possible^_^...

hmm Papa? hey she's talking like Chris. I wonder if that even dawned on Leon.

Hey! You're not going to finish? Finish, finish, finish!

great story! Please update soon!

oh ok i have a question to which ANYONE can answer is chris a mute

uh ok whatever what is this littel proloug for?

O! I hope there's more! I absolutely loved it! Poor D... stupid Leon! O well ... they'll get together eventually, right?

Any way, as far as critiqueing goes ... I have one tip:
Comma after someone speaks ...

"Let's get you changed." D said =
"Let's get you changed," D said.

Otherwise.. totally awesome! Please continue! Please!

ME want more! ;0; I love this fic please continue ;0; please!

more ... please?

And?AND?
OOH COOMME OONN Iwhould realy like to see what happends next. ^-^

o very good. keep going i'll be waiting for the next installment

THis is nice I like it alot but it's kinda confusing. I can't wait till the next chapter

Alana: Yeah who knew he was a family man!

Leo: the things you lean!

that was... short but sweet