Finally!
I have found you again!

I read this so long ago and I couldn't for the life of me remember where who had written it or the title! Thankfully I decided lets use the search engine. xD

Anyway. I absolutly fell in love with your style of writing. The unnatrual sentences and fragements really dug into the games signature otherworld creep factor.

When I think of Shadow Hearts I think of this tug of war and jerky motion. That fit perfectly with your writing.

The way you added much of your own sequences and interpretations while maintaining much of the original dialogue and sequences was beautiful and felt natrual and nicely put together.

I honestly think of the song True Voice when reading this fanfic and the really abstract composition and that's what really sets your story apart.

It's voice.

great story please continue NOW

Maijijijiji, I'm very disappointed that you haven't kept up with this story. D:

And in case you're feeling a bit too slow today, this is BM talking. D:

wow u got the story bang on! If there was a novel of shadow hearts, i'd recommend you to write it! wow, are you by any chance the artist of all that cool shadow hearts fanart? (my deviantart name is Akiriana) if u are, then wow. not only does your artwork inspire me, but your writing as well!!

I too love shadow hearts and i'm currently playing the second one (sry for the comment about alice, i didn't play it yet. I answered my own question by playing it though. He, he. i'm almost on the second disk! ^^)

Well good job, keep it up and never give up!

~ARK

Yes, it's true, there are other "similar" projects, but none with your style and flair. Devil's Masks is going in a different direction so no worry there. All the others are... well, not up to snuff.

You've got a good writing style, even when using the script, you've added your own touches, your own elements to fill in what could be a blah retelling. I would encourage you to continue writing.

This is really well done, oops, I'm no critic though, just like to say I really like your writing style, so descriptive and detailed and very entertaining. I was literally hooked from first paragraph, and I could almost relive the first horror I felt when I first saw that opening in the game, it is really gruesome and you have captured the scene so amazingly.

please continue, this is incredibly beautiful, makes me ashamed of me own fics^_^

Don't know if it was successful.. Honey, this is GREAT! I loved it! You captured everything perfectly! The feel, attitudes, everything! And I understand about the sentence structure, that's how I write too. o.o;

Lynn U - wow, thank you! I wasn't expecting a review (and such a long and in-depth one O.O) so soon!

I really appreciate your comments on the description and the characterization ^^; I'm always terribly paranoid that what I'm doing makes no sense. And while I would love to take credit for the accuracy XD I had a game script to help me out (It's available at GameFAQs) I did play through this part of the game (Trans-Siberian Express to Zhaoyang) a few more times to get some tidbits that hadn't been transcripted, and also to get a clearer sense of the mood and the actions.

If I continue this, I will definitely take your comments in mind. Monologues are my greatest weakness. XD; Thanks so much for the feedback, it was super-helpful!

*SQUEE!*

I've been waiting for someone to write something like this! It's wonderful, absolutely wonderful! ^_^

I love the descriptions the most; how you bring the world of SH to life through mere words. I love the -way- you write those descriptions (yay for fragmented poetry writing styles! XD), and I only wish I could pull off half the description you manage without going into lengthy, boring paragraphs.

Your Yuri is, quite frankly, spot-on. None of that romantic mushiness when it comes to him and Alice-- not yet, anyway. The extra dialogue you inserted flowed very well with the in-game dialogue. ^_^

I marvel at the accuracy of your writing. Did you play through this entire sequence and make notes before writing the chapter? You wrote everything, up to and including the battle with the Malice in the Graveyard. I'm in awe, considering I didn't even know which mask spoke what half the time I played the game!

My only request is more focus on the characters in later chapters. ^^ I realise this is just the first chapter, and events are moving fast enough that you wouldn't want to slow them down with inner monologue and the like. But if you write future chapters (and I hope you do!) I hope to see more of what the characters themselves are thinking as they move through the plot. That's what makes a novelisation worth reading, after all. If it's just a step-by-step guide, I may as well play the game myself. ;D

Again, much love for the description. *wub* You should write more! :O