a very well written story that has been well worth the read

keep pumping them out !

This easily the best "Ocarina" novelizations out there. I enjoy your much darker take on the storyline. One can't expect Link to react well to discovering he is the saviour of the world. Although, I do agree with Caleb Nova, the "fallen hero" section was a bit too long...you could have easily cut that down.

However, the battle sequence where Link and Dark Link finally have it out was one of the best action sequences I have seen in a fanfiction. I especially loved the amazing reason for Link's new left-handedness. I cannot wait for the next update. Don't worry, I am very easy on those authors in college, as I myself am in college. Your devotion to this fic is commendable. Good luck!

Sixty chapters, and you're still on the Water Temple? Man, that's gotta be tough on you. Best as I can tell, this won't be fininshed for a long time. Keep up the good work, and my you be free from the curse known as writer's block.

Wow. I just finished chapter 60 after reading the whole thing at a stretch. Not all at once, mind you. Even I'm not that insane.

Thank you for a great novelization that is more than a retelling of the story - a novelization that is humorous and dark and intriguing, all at the same time.

You and Peptuck both deserve uber-hugs for your great work.

I hope you'll come out with more excellent mateial.

-Aaron

PLEASE UPDATE ALREADY! I CAN'T TAKE THE SUSPENSE! HURRY UP! PLEASE!

How will Link battle the Iron Knuckles? Man, that's going to be awesome.

Only now Ive seen youve updated this story after I - deeply saddened, by the way - had abandoned all hope for a new update. Who would think somebody would work almost five years on one story? And such a great story at that, keeping that standart through all the time.

The part where Sheik went looking for Zelda had me confused, was that supposed to be a flashback? Because Link can hardly be trapped in the Sacred Realm while at the same time, ahem, "enjoying" the company of Ruto, now can he?

Anyhow, I hope for another update, not soon, but sometime in the future.

An excellent chapter.

What I loved most was the insights on Dampe, and Sheik. Those were well done as well as interesting, and the display of emotions felt believable for both scenes. Very good.

As always, the detail in your battles is amazing. I can picture everything perfectly, which gives this story another way to be awesome. My favorite was how you described the Moblin's head being crushed, that was cool.

Can't wait for the next chapter!

As usual during the course of working my way through these chapters I thought of a million things to comment on and promptly forgot every single one of them upon reaching the final page. Maybe I can dredge something up anyway.

First off it's an interesting take on the tried and true story of the game. I can't say I like everything you've done with it- in some cases I think you strayed a little too far from the original design. I understand as well as anyone the need to change canon, certainly I did so myself with my Resident Evil 4 fanfiction. More often than not games contain things that are inexplicable, riddled with plot holes, completely unrealistic or just plain stupid. Most of the time it's all of the above. So obviously you couldn't stick with the in game dialogue or many of the occurances, and I agree whole heartedly with that array of tweaking. However I felt the aspect of Link's magic powers was pulled back from the game to the point where it now seems to be unrelated. Receiving powers from the Fairies was a perfectly servicable plot device, and I guess frankly entire affair feels imposed on the otherwise familiar structure.

Also Link's mood swings became a tiring story point after the first couple of rapid changes. Link can only be an asshole so many times before you stop caring what happens to him. I'm glad he seems to be on the right track again but that whole period was to be perfectly honest, somewhat boring. I couldn't help but get the impression that you didn't care all that much for the evil Link yourself, and your writing suffered appropiately. (And 'Magi-Con'. This is rather painfully derivative of any number of things. I guess there's something to be said for the classics, but how many times has 'Magi' been stuck in front of another one syllable word..)

Overall it's my opinion that the chapters concerning Young Link were superior to what came afterwards. Those chapters were full of a certain world revealing wonder and not as cluttered with invented plot devices. I hope as the story progresses you return to that certain charm that drew me into this fanfiction in the first place.

Other than those overbearing opinions the only real problems have to do with your tenses. You're good with the spelling and grammar but tend to lose track of your past and present tenses from time to time. Nothing unreadable though.

Now that I've crapped on your story in every conceivable way (And wait for you to return the favor) I'll be happy to say that I enjoyed your retelling of one of my favorite games. The intrapersonal relationships between Link and the various female cast members are interesting in that as of yet there is no clear winner for his affections. This could prove to be a highly entertaining situation come the end of your tale. I'll cross my fingers and hold out for some hardcore sex. Your grasp of the world is impeccable and either you have a perfect memory or an emulator, possibly both. The fact that the Sages can't leave Sageland or whatever the hell it's called seems a little too pat- perhaps it isn't entirely true? I'm sure there's more to be written there. You have a large amount of writing talent, which means you are more than capable of shitting all over my pathetic body of work in return. I would be interested to see if you move on to other fandoms in the future. Spreading out is always fun- don't confine yourself to just one universe.

An enjoyable story better than an estimated ninety-five percent of the absolute crap this site hosts.

Wow, what a great chapter! Had I known you had updated I probably would have reviewed earlier, but all well! In any case, your use of transitions from scene to scene is great, and leaves the reader in a lot of suspense! You have great potential as a writer and I can't wait to follow you with this story until the end. Also, congrats on the good grades! And I was curious, I know in the game Link fights Dark Link right before Morpha, so will the sinister incarnation of our hero return? I sure hope so!

Dude, your a beast at writing

Hey not bad. I can't wait to read the rest.

Not only the best fic I've ever read, but one of the longest too Keep up the good work! {/cheer}

hi, this is actually my review for chapter 60 it's just my computer wouldn't let me review that chapter for some reason,anyway this chapter was terrific as well,poor dampe :(, and congratulations on your passing grades! keep up the good work!

Well, I just finished Chapter 60, and I must say, you are an excellent writer. Not only did you make Dark Link the most awesome evil character in this story yet, but I love how you've made Malon such a powerful character. Usually people say it should be Zelda. And I know that looks like where you're going, but I think Malon because she is the only girl to love him that doesn't become a frickin Sage! I also liked how you managed to substitute all of his gear instead of the Iron Boots. You're awesome, and I can't wait for the next chapters. Keep it up, I want to read more. Back to my earlier review comment. I love how you explain the little details, like how his earring came to be (I always wondered where that come from as well.) And bringing in Iron Knuckles? Whoo boy! Next to Dark Link, they are easily my favorite enemy. Way to go, keep this up. I love your awesome ability to foreshadow things.