well that was disapointing i better see some kick ** kinsu power soon is all i can say

Discontinued?!?! Why? This is pure gold!! I don't care if it takes you months to update, but to just stop something this awesome is painful. I don't remember how many crappy Naruto AUs I had to dig through to find this masterpiece, but I know it was a least a ton. You hear that; a ton of crap and then I find this wonderful piece of ARTwork only to find it discontinued. Why, is it a beta you need? Someone to bounce plot ideas off of? A research assistant, because I know a ton of trivia about Naruto, as well as having some rather logical extrapolations, and I would actually like to have some use for it all?! Your writing is engrossing and flows extremely well. Your plot line is clear and your flashbacks fit well and aren't cheesy in the slightest. Your original characters are ORIGINAL, funny, and thought through. The original jutsu are explained and defined throughly as well as having original, thought out backgrounds. Kyuubi's memories and thoughts are great and within character for how you have 'him' set up, which is more than can be said about other stories. I can't find anything to complain about, except for the fact that it's discontinued!! I almost want to cry. It's like having my favorite toy in the whole world stolen from me, your story is that cool and awesome! Is there anything that can be done to convince you to continue? Even an hiatus would be preferable; at least I know you'll come back to it eventually!

...Kakashi knew the Rasengan.

okay this is not a flame only friendly advise Rasengan is actually called spiraling sphere and it is NOT a wind element composition but physical composition, Fuuton Rasenshuriken is a wind element composition

Well, damn. Your chapters and stories are intense. Every paragraph you put into your writing contains colorful adjectives and actually help the reader understand the char's feeling or an idea. I envy your dedication to your story, especially since your able to have this amazing output of ideas every week. Not only that, but you can actually take those ideas and make them flow into the story with efficiency. It's really hard for other people to that. I kinda feel a bit guilty, seeing as I only reviewed once after 4 chapters of 25k+ words. But, honestly, it's just so hard to not continue reading after that really mean cliffy. Seeing as you haven't updated this in 4 years, even pre-Crucible Naruto would have guessed that this story has been abandoned. Which is a shame, not that I'm trying to insult you. I'm just going to try and enjoy (which won't take much effort, especially with the amount of comedy you fit into the plot) the rest. Cheers!

~Just ticked suscription to story in case you ever come back =)

Wow this is one immense story, I kinda can't come up with any constructive critisism yet, apart from the fact that Ino annoys me a bit, and seems a bit wampow super powered :P
Are you stil writing this fic? I dunno its like 2009 and this was last updated in 2005... :P
~jolteonforever

Awesome story, I am sorry you are done with it. Thank you for sharing your time and talent with us.

Just wanted to say that I utterly adore your story!
Your perspective on both Kakashi and Sauske (when I first read it) was a bit of a shock but really refreshing. I simply had never thought about the situation in that manner and I really like your theory for why Sauske defected and why he is/was such an **- it actually makes sense! Imagine that, eh?
Your attention to detail and how you made the Naruto universe the future of our universe was pretty cool too. (Hahaha, Desert Eagle!)
I love Tobias. (freaking crazy-** gnomes :snicker:)
There are a LOT of things I like about your story, but it can be pretty much summed up with:

YOU ARE BAD-**.

Totally looking forward to reading more when/if you are able to do so, but it's been one hell of a read and I'm glad I stumbled upon it. Kudos!

This is a cool and awesome story! I'm amazed that no one that writes fanfic about merging has really thought this out aside from you. i applaud your work...

Heh, i like cheeky stories*, this one is not quie as cheky as I like (In fact it's mostly amusing but not that cheeky) but i enjoyed it enough to add.

No critique as such. Didn't spot any flaws, plot holes or stupidity.



*In general cheeky stories are ones that would be amazingly stupid but for the grace of good penmanship that makes them awesomely amusing. make a wish by rorshacksblot (HP) or Reload by case 13 (Naruto)

It's too bad you gave up on this one, it's really a great fic

Too bad

Wow! This isn't a review, so much as a compliment. Nicely crafted plot. I don't think I've seen a merge between Naruto and Kyuubi like this before.

i must admit, this is one of the better stories ive read recently. it actually got me reinterested in naruto fanfiction. i was burnt out by stories that changed plot devices but still had the same story as the canon with either naruto stonger than everything but never showing off his strength or has one weakness everyone exploits, or naruto super stong but still as dumb as a rock, so he just fallows canon story with couple new tricks. the one thing i want to know is why is this story discontinued. it is to good to fall by the wayside. i hope it is continued or rewritten. it is to good not to be completed.

It's really a shame that this story is discontinued. I would have really enjoyed another chapter.
I don't think I am over-exaggerating when I say that you are one of the best writers that I have ever encountered. Period.
I look forward to seeing more of your stories. I've put this story on alert just in case you ever decide to update. Thanks for the read.
-EternalFrost

sweet can't wait to see naruto's new tai-jutsu