Great Story!

I just thought I'd say again, you did great work with Way of the Warrior, this is a fantastic series about Max giving into the darker side of who she is and going Punisher-Style in the city.

I like the interaction between Logan and OC in this chapter. I also like the fact that you don't have OC spouting ridiculous ghetto slang like some fanfic writers do. She's a tough one to write without making her sound silly.

Absolutely fantastic! I think Angel is taking the righ path. If you can, you may as well!

Luv,

Another fanfiction and Dark Agel fan, from Australia

hey!are you going to do a sequal?its ok if not i liked it i was just woondering if i should look for one!-:O

Woo! *tiredly tackles clings and ductapes*

The last chapter was excellent. I didn't review it because I was too anxious to get to this chapter. That's a high compliment from me. You tied this story together well at the end; it's a good story, and I enjoyed it. You did a fine job of crystallizing the differences between the different crusades Logan and Max hold dear. I'm glad you let Max kill Cameron Dean; I would have been very disappointed if she hadn't. For the briefest of moments, I thought you were going to let him live and have Max become a better person. That would have been somehow unsatisfying. Now that he's dead, she's free to reform to a more human state. The sentences that follow are about the end. Logan went the way of the reporter. *laugh* Was there no other word to use to describe Logan than reporter? Max went the way of the warrior, hence the title; but did she really go the way of the warrior? Max doesn't apologize for her actions, but she doesn't exactly endorse them ringingly. We only saw Logan's point of view on the new Max in this last chapter. This story has a bit of an unfinished feel to it- and that's appropriate. After all, no story every really ends. All that matters is where you write "fin." I'll look forward to starting Code of Honor.

I'm not sure when you wrote this particular chapter, but it rather nicely parallels the recent storyline in which Lydecker lectures Logan about Max being a trained killer and not some girl he could just take home with him. I hadn't thought of Eyes Only doing a story on Justice; that's a nice twist.

Slivers of the human Max are still around, and that's nice to see. The tension between Max and Logan is good. A couple of gentle gibes: Why hasn't Max heard of irradiated milk? Logan put "Dust in the Wind" on a disc he made for Max? (I'm going to assume "Dust in the wind" had some symbolism attached to it, and that's why you put it in...)

At long last, Logan's 'jouranlistic' instincts lead him to the correct answer! I got a good picture of Cesar in this chapter, good job. Oh, and I want to add that I like the little quotes you put at the beginning of your chapters.

It seems Max crossed a line in this chapter; efficiency has meshed with cruelty. I bought into Max using a gun because it's sensible. I was less than persuaded that she would smile after putting bullets through the foreheads of three sentries. Of course, this may just be evidence that she's going over the deep end. I'll think on that one.

Good thing you're writing more! As, of course, the story isn't really finished yet. This is really good interaction between the two of them, and their parting is poignant and true to character. Logan's desire to make the potentially last dinner perfect was a nice touch... it conveys a lot without being overtly expository. I'm looking forward to the next bit!

Wow. Harsh. I like it. One question, probably a result of having read the beginning of this story awhile ago-where's Max getting the arsenal? Where's she keeping it? Anyway, her pondering on the duality of her life is dead-on, something I can definitely see her having to deal with as a character. Also, nice details about Seattle; I was just there this weekend, having a pint at the Pike Pub and Brewery. Are you from the Northwest, by any chance? Anyway, great work as usual.

Hmmm. Good call about the question of journalistic integrity-I didn't see that one coming. Good, but short! The end bit seemed a little rushed; Cindy made the effort to go over to Logan's, and the conversation was a little short and abruptly ended to play smoothly for me. Imagining it as a scene being played out, that is... Anyway, as usual, my quibbles are small and insignificant, hope you don't mind me mentioning them.

Well, I've been out of the country on vacation for the last couple of weeks, and it was nice to come back to all these new chapters... Great stuff, as usual. While part of me still rebels at the thought of Max using guns and plastic explosives, you write it well, definitely exciting. Going back to the violence discussion on the forum, I do think it's a little detailed for PG-13, but that's just me... Fractured tibias. Ugh. (Reminds me of a Monty Python sketch, though-"Fractured tibia, Sergeant? Proper little Mummy's boy, aren't we?" but I digress.) But of course I see how the somewhat extreme violence is necessary to show Max's dark side to the fullest (I bet you just loved Pollo Loco, didn't you?). Interesting, and fitting, that Original Cindy caught on before Logan, and I'm anxious to see where it all goes...