WOW!

Excellent story. I absolutely loved it and am now favoriteing it and about to check out what else you have written.

Excellent, inteligent piece. Well crafted plot and characters.

Couldn't stop until I finished it. Thank you!

This is a great story! I love that you made someone for Francine. Amanda/Lee public knowledge married stories are my favorite!

Very good story. Loved it. It was very interesting and kept my attention at all times. Keep up the good work!

Very good. You did a great job with your plot line. I will say though, that Commander Data is more child-like than Dr. Smyth. Data will never be that cold.

Congratulations. Intricate plot, tense situations, with a dash of humor and an overdue romance for Francine. Thank you.

I am not sure why I had not read this story. But I am so glad that today with time on my hand I read the entire thing. It was wonderful. I could not stop and when the cable went out I was forced to go back to phone lines. Really great. I will go now and see if you have anything else posted. Keep writing!

Very interesting read. First, I need to say that I wish that the terrorists in your story were not Muslim. It is so frequent that Islam is seen as a symbol for terrorism when other groups of terrorists exist (IRA, militia in backwoods USA) I request this as an American Muslim living in the USA who is tired of having words of prayer such as "Inshallah" a phrase standing for with the blessings of God used by violent and homicidal individuals. Too bad that when stories are written with villans who are Christian, no such verses like "If God lets us" are used. Funny, don't ya think?

SPOILERS: The plot and pacing definitely picked and steam, which is good. It's a very interesting idea and Birol always makes a good villian. However, I must object to your use of CNN in this story. No WAY would a news organization air something like LIVE. CNN AND THE GOV'T wouldn't allow them to air footage like that on a national feed. I agree Billy, et al would have access, but not the public at large. It simply isn't policy, if for no other reason than every sicko would send their tapes to be broadcast. They might air something "after the fact," but never, ever live. I was very distrubed by that section of the story.

I'm three chapters into this story and wanted to make a few comments...SPOILERS: This is very well written, however it feels like there is too much going on. I already count about four plots, all of which are interesting on their own. However, together it's a bit overwhelming. Also, I think there is a little too much 'wink-wink' to the reader. I can't explain it, other than you are telling us way too much. The first chapter, at the ball, the joking about whether Lee would pick Francine or his wife, the banter felt a little sitled and "wink-wink" in that you told us what we know. With proper dialogue and non-verbals you can tell us they are teasing and joking without SAYING they are teasing and joking. Also, some of the Amanda/Francine stuff seems off. In the beg. you definitly have Francine pegged, that she respects Amanda is but is somewhat jealous of her. But for her to come over and tell her someone else has the dress felt very first season Francine, not post fourth. Also, this is very picky, but I don't see Amanda sitting on Lee's lap at a formal function. Finally you kind of lost me on the whole jo-jo/Francine/Lee kissing backstory. It didn't seem terribly relevant. I think there are more effective literary devices to establish back story then the whole flashback. Ok, moving on to chapter 4.

Wow, Rev, this was just excellent. The plot was very well-crafted and detailed. Your knowledge of the subject matter, from biblical to biological, is obvious. One of my favorite aspects of this posting, aside from the story itself, was the addition of different sets of author's notes for the different chapters. It made a terrific story seem so much more personal.

May I gush? I need to gush. This story was RIVETING. It's 2 a.m. on a weeknight, if that gives you any indication. I enjoyed every word. I thought the plot was very tight and openly disagree with the comment that it needed to be pared down in places. (Personally, I loved the part about Francine's and Jo's training.) I didn't feel it drag on at all - quite the opposite in fact. This had a fabulous plot and some terrific new characters. And you gave so much depth to some of the series' minor characters. I'll never look at Jamie the same way again - you made him really wonderful. Lastly, I've noticed how the other great authors at this site really improve over time and can't even imagine where you'll be someday. You've started at the top, and I truly hope you keep blessing us with your gifted storytelling. Thank you for writing this and sharing it with us. Way to go, Rev!

And now that I've finally managed to read the whole story, I would like to thank you for a delightful afternoon. The time and care you put into this story are obvious (and you actually sent me after my dictionary a few times, which is rare ). I may have to read it again, however, for the plot was quite intricate, and I'm a little fuzzy on some of the specifics (not that I'm complaining; it's fun to be made to think). There were also some places I thought could've been pared, b/c they detracted from the main story telling (e.g. the part about Francine and JoJo's history at the training facility). I might also watch the use of parenthetical references. In most cases those could've been incorporated into the main story, and actually made it stronger. Thanks again though . . . this is a keeper!

I've been dying to read this, but waiting until it was all done. So far, I must say I'm really enjoying it. You have an excellent grasp of both the English language and the characters. I really appreciate that Francine and Billy are getting equal billing. Although, Birchwood Forest, the gardener, has been giving me giggles.

I thought this was a great fic, especially for a first attempt! There were a few areas that I felt could've used a little help, but overall I really enjoyed it. I especially liked the tag's reference to ST:TNG. I've been a ST fan since before I was born, or so it seems. Great job, keep writing. If your interested in my thoughts for improvement more specifically, email me. I'd be happy to share.