Oh, wow...that was a really, really good poem. No offense, but I can't really imagine Pettigrew thinking anything like this, but your imagery was great and you've got an amazing way with words. Try something like this for Remus or James, is my advice. Maybe Dumbledore. Don't let such talent go to waste!

hey person! I just wanted 2 thank you for reading my poem/story about Sirius, and for being nice enough to review. I also just wanted 2 say that Ashes is a beautiful poem. Your words were very vivid and painted a clear image of Peter's pain. Awesome job!

~Demon Woman

wow! that's deep!
I still don't like pettigrew though no offense!