I just wish someone would do a serious version of this story, that doesn't:

- portray Ranma as dumb (not ignorant).

- consider the Futaba/Misaki pairing inviolate. (Can't have Ranma come between them, or even join them.)

- ram a Ranma/Futana relationship down the reader's throat.

- have Ranma-chan lose all of her martial skill if confronted with a sexually aggressive male (Futana-kun).

- end with Ranma being more female than male at the end, in a relationship with a predominantly male character, and still have a libido of virtually zero when male (i.e., not interested in pursuing a relationship with a girl...not when 'she's' got a stud at hand anyway).

Continued from Chapter 9

Whether or not you intend for there to be any romance between Akane and Ranma she is stll the most important person in Ranma's life and Ranma's love at the end of wedding fiasco has already started to blossom, This makes Akane a big character and without using her in a responsible manner it can crush your whole story. Especialy if you make her into a big bad after she risked everything just to save ranma's life in the final battle.

I'm somewhat pleased with Nodokas characterisation here in the story, many people make her out to be much more level headed than she really is, The story is ultimately savable, but much of it is a wreck the middle is quite boaring with virtualy every chapter being the same, Important characters do little more than give advice while you force interesting characters off to the sidlines, Some of the most interesting parts of the story are all related to the antagonists and not any of the main characters, not only are important characters like akane and ryouga pretty much not played at all, the new characters are little more than devices to spout out normal people advice. Alot of these characters need some depth and Ranma and her parents cant be the only people who have that.

Very terrible story, but a good foundation
Very out of character, Especialy with Akane,
Many of the chapters sounded very self inserty, but the bigger problem is your set peices are clearly visible

>>ranma introverts for a little bit
>>ranma talks to X character about something
>>X character feeds them the correct answer
>>Ranma quickly accepts it.

This is about 3-4 entire chapters of your whole story, and it doesnt help that on some of them you even put headers between every tiny piece. Stories need to flow better than this.

the other big issue is Akane. She is a proactive character, very proactive, you have her absent for most of the story, this is generaly unnacceptable from a character standpoint, Even when they are at odds akane Always shows up around ranma, and often to help him or her, it's especialy evident in the Skating contest and further fights out. Instead you have her sitting there for most of the story

It's also worth mentioning that it takes 9 chapters for you to even show a hint of Akane's soft side, I don't know if youre an anti Akane fanatic, But Akane, Like Ranma, Is archtypal Tsundere, She like Ranma hides her caring under denials or insults and rough behavior. You simply have akane acting cruel for the whole thing. It really shows you either hate or don't know much about akane's character when out of all the characters present she gets the least ammount of introverted thought text. It tells me you have no idea whats going on in her head or that it's not important.

This was a very good fic, and I really enjoyed it. Very nice job

I'm surprised that the cold aura normally generated by the soul of ice wasn't mentioned. Other than that, this was a really good chapter

fantastic storry, please write a sequell

Haven't read this before for whatever reason. Other then the first chapter which I found less sophisticated then the rest of the story it was very well done. The cross-over and character development aspects were done very well indeed and the dialogue was written quite well. The only real problem I had with the story was that I wish you had gone a little bit more into the future in the Epilogue, but the ending scene was very well written and nice regardless.

It's too bad that you missed out on some opportunities though. It would have been interesting to see how Kuno/Kodachi dealt with Ranma's new relationships, and it would have been interesting to see more of the training regiment he/she was being put through. Regardless though, very well written and excellent story.

wow that had to be one of the greatest crossovers i've read not only was i suprised that you KNEW about fubata-kun change but you took it to another level 10/10

Awesome story! One of the few good Ranma stories I've read. I'm glad you added the Futaba-kun Change in as well. Ranma needed more people like him in his life. Again, awesome stroy!

A very intersting, very entertaining story. It brings to light aspects of show that isn't written much about. Though at times I thought it was a bit perverted but still a great read

I don't normally like crossovers but decided to check out the first chapter anyway and got really into this, I didn't really know what Futaba-kun was but the story explains enough without getting too far away from Ranma 1/2

In fact, my only real problem was that there was one too many 'blink-blinks' it seemed to happen every other sentence, but thats kinda trivial really

Best curse acceptance fic, hell best ranma fic, and definitely one of the better fics I've ever read.

That was a sweet story. I hadn't seen the show it was crossed over with, and I normally hate crossovers, but this one certainly worked well with Ranma! Thanks for sharing.

Very good job here. You are one of my favorite authors on this site, but I've never read this before. Too bad for me, eh? Well, thanks for writing this, and here''s hoping you get back into writng soon, bye for now.

I enjoyed it; though the ending was kinda anti-climatic.