Wow, I can sense this caring, intimate closeness betwee these two without they're having to be romance. Nice work.

I see Abby already found this fic. Unsurprising, given how she adores Rishid. Myself, I'm just pleased to see such an oft-ignored character given his due.

*cries* It's Malik, not Marik.

Poor Jou. What happened?

This definitely could be given a second chapter, or even more, delving into the background and explaining things. How did Jou lost his soul? How did Malik become Pharaoh?

...I like Malik as a Pharaoh.

Please continue this. It has so much potential!

Wow, this is quite good. :: nods:: I had no idea it was Jou until Rishid actually said his name. :: applauds::

...That ... thats just gread! Keep going!

An engaging and intrigueing 'missing scene' that I enjoyed to read very much. In part, of course, because it's about Rishid and he's being a somewhat good person in it. I loved the way you depicted his character in this piece. -

This story, habitual of all your writing, is beautiful.

Hey, I remember this from KG! I still like it as much as I did then. Especially the "bright and lifeless as jewels".

How beautiful! I love how delicate and yet how intense this AU piece is. You've created heart-wrenching emotions in a few simple lines.

Your style is...remarkable. Just exquisite. "As trusting as a flower"; "Stone blocks sealed the domicile into a crypt"; "Sorrowful eyes darkened to onyx"... I want to gather all of your words up and hug them! o_O Yes, I suspect I'm a little weird that way...

And you've really got Rishid's character showing through. (is a Rishid fan) His faith in Malik, despite the circumstances, was perfect. The last three chilling lines were all too telling of that. Wonderful job.

Woah. Taht is...scary.

very veyr good

kudos and snaps congrats!

I like it so far. Is it sort of a bout what would happen if marik had won? I think. I don't know. I liek it though keep going!

Damn. This is warped. Firstly, an interesting twist in having Marik win; second, a really cool choice of perspective. I mean ... dude. O.O Bloody cool. 0_o

Neat. At first I thought it was Malik who had his soul taken away by Yami... Kind of short, but otherwise fairly well written.