   SATAN5098 2008-05-13 . chapter 2luv it! luv it! luv it!
if u don't rite more im gonna hang u from ur toes at the top of Big Ben |
 bumblebee115 2005-10-30 . chapter 2Thats so cute poor thing! |
| artemis94 2005-10-01 . chapter 1 that was a great story so can you update soon please! |
 GoldenFlither 2005-07-26 . chapter 2:'( so sad..tommy ran away? omg! im like in tears now! stupid cruddy bullies...
im glad yu wrote a sequel! update soon! |
 Brown Eyed Sage 2005-07-26 . chapter 2that was better. and i'm glad you updated. hope to read more from you.
sara |
| Stealer of Shino's Glasses 2005-07-26 . chapter 2 i want 1/5 fluff so update!
#5: 1/5 what do you mean!
me: takes #5s hat and runs away
#5: why do you keep on doing this!
me: because i'm evil muhahahahaahahaha by the way can you read and review my story fairy tales? |
 Tisbee 2005-05-12 . chapter 1Berry nice. ^.^ I like the descriptions. I thought Wally's dad said he didn't have a daughter... but it doesn't matter- I'm just being annoying again. Bring Hoagie and the others in son! Nothin' wrong with the fluffiness, though! Keep it up!
~Bee~ |
| Cris 2005-03-10 . chapter 1 Good start! Please update! |
 rini124 2005-03-09 . chapter 1Hope you update soon! |
| Brown Eyed Sage 2005-03-09 . chapter 1 good. it was really good. but for the editing tip, i would suggest that when the next person speaks, continue on the next line. that way, your readers won't be confused of who is speaking. example(this is from your story btw):
“Tell me again why we have to stay in this cruddy city!” He demanded.
“Because Sport,” his dad said, “the company can’t transfer me all the way to Australia yet, so we need to stay here. It’ll just be for a few months, OK?”
but it is still a good story and i hope you update soon. XD.
sara |
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