That was soo adorable! Loved it!

Believe it or not, when you write stories your meant to use paragraphs. It breaks it up a bit and actually keeps the reader interested.

Nice and sweet.

I'm a little late coming to this story, but then I am late at everything.

Loved it. Short, but that's exactly what it should be. You said all that should have been said.

pretty good you could use with some more paragraphing though. one paragraph just makes a person not want to read it.

That was good. I liked it.

That was sweet. I really liked it. Private moments are the best.

Tori

Dude, it does really show a typical day with Harry. It's cool that it's so short and yet could gt some real..thing, across.

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The thing is good.

And I don't know what I just typed so I'll just be like

omG taht wuz god! u r teh awesom!11!eleven!

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Wow, when did you write THIS? It's... well, not good, but not bad either! Have you always had a talent for writing, or was this just a fluke that worked itself out when you were younger?

Plausible and nice.

I did some math, because I think I'm in love with you, and were you 14 when you wrote this? Dunno if I liked it. hm.

History of Magic, not magic history :).

And well this is not really a story is it? More like a moment in life or something.

Shun-Shend duh gao-wahn! 58 stories? you are a machine!

The story was pretty good. It didnt make sense though.

Cute ficcie. Ah, hooray for Harry Potter fans. You seem to have the wizarding thing down, so want to join Toute La Magie, a roleplaying group? Check it out.(The site is under mild construction)

http:/w.freewebs.com/toutelamagie/index.htm

Hey, um, your story was a little weird. I think you can do better. I dont actually get the "Quiet Moment". Well, that was my 2 cents. -Jessica