thanks

its a great story and funny too

What does Rika Silverstar mean she's never ehard of Ace Lightning?!
Um, anyway I like this tory... kick ass ladies is right, but then that's what Mary Sues are. I like it when people make Mary Sues and are not too proud to say so, what i don't like is when people pull up a totally obvious sue and then spend half the story trying to convince you they're not! You have not done this. Nice one... this story rocks so far. keep it up.

I love me, therefore I love this Sue-fic. :P Even so, it seems to be getting less cliche-mocking and more genuine-Suefic, partly because you've thrown your own 'shipping delusions in there and partly because you haven't really mocked any cliches in this chapter. IMO, if you want to write Ace/Sparx, I'd suggest either making it completely over-the-top-funny and mocking that it's so...uncanonical (much as are Mary-Sues), or else Seriously Dealing With Canon. Of course, from the way you wrote Ace virtually ignoring Sparx for the sake of the Sues in the first bit, you might not be heading that way at all. And I think that Sparx deserves better than someone who patronises her and is overprotective, someone who's blatantly shown interest in her worst enemy, and her commanding officer on top of that. Not a brilliant relationship, with an "in my opinion" tacked heavily onto the end of that and an acknowledgment that "it's your parodyfic".

Re Kilobyte, I think he's extremely OOC. (I KNOW this is a parody, but could you at least mock it more or something? Or maybe it'd be funnier if the canons were reasonably in character? I don't mind Random being bowled over by a snog with an attractive woman he'd had a previous connection with, but Kilobyte suddenly falling for RandomGirl is a little unusual.) He's NOT going to change anything because of a pretty face (see also, his canon interaction with the AttractiveHumanoids, one of whom would be quite capable of imitating Sarahfina's perfection, not that she' need to). You've also committed the writing crime of "telling not showing". I don't know if it was intentional or not (and I think it probably was), but you call Sarahfina "A Genius" and yet have her: rush into Ace/Sparx matchmaking with Very Little Signs (So he TALKS about his friend and teammate. Yeah, Troo Luv.), and convince Kilobyte based on LOOKS not LOGIC.

M, thickening plot. Looks interesting. :)

Is it just me, or did one of your reviewers miss the "parody" classification? If so, I'm very very scared right now...

Yay! More! LOL! I'm getting interested in what happens next. These are some kick butt ladies XD But since I've never heard of Ace Lightning I'm a little confused but that's ok.

o. Yay. Random. Yum. *achem*
The dark past thing is funny! And Kilobyte soon. Yay. That's going to be funny. Go the name Juzt.S Dunn. Very clever :P

This is funny! I like the dragging-in of the Dark Past cliche. :) Seems like SOMEONE has "daddy issues"... And those adjectives! THOSE ADJECTIVES! Hee, v. funny. There were a few minor grammar things that could so easily have been corrected by beta, but I won't get nitpicky right now. Was the fight scene meant to be deliberately bad, btw?

"resistant to all our methods..." Are you going to get Morally Ambiguous here? ;)

I love the joke about the dark pasts!
A very very clever story XD
YAY for canon characters! This is going to be...interesting...

*Just realises who Katielle is* BWHAHAHAHAHAH! YAY! FUN!FUN!FUN! XD

hello

i like your story except

RANDOM'S MINE MINE MINE MINE
but i'll forgive you for pairing him up with laura

But you DARE give MY Marky to any one! i'll kill you, Cause he is MINE! keep up the good work!

Hahahaha - that is hilarious!

OMG its like Lord Voldermorts daughter-army of mary sues transformed into Lightning Knights!

Well, Im very impressed. Two thumbs up from this end of the country

See! I'm reviewing! LOL! Um...I'm new at this so bare with me. Yeah...good writing skills. I like how well you describe things without giving tideous stuff that we don't need to know. I have that problem. XD Interesting characters too. *sigh* Maybe I should get some books about how to write? Anyways, I like it.

Squee! Sues! M. (Is hyper. Sorry.)

Well, you managed to get a lot of cliches in there, and it is So Clearly a parody. With injokes. Nice injokes. And Acacia Moon! So Sueish! Bountiful chests, forest-green eyes. Ah yes. The Sues.

"Clairetta" sounds like Scarab from Kabuki. Not sure if that was intentional or not, but I like it!

Despite my musical knowledge, I'm not sure what a "base" guitar is. Could you perhaps explain how it relates to a bass guitar? And even if I was a Sue, I would never say, "This could be AT trap".

(I'd spell it Seraphina, btw. :P)

So funny! Lovely!

Whe! Go the sues! Am one of the few who probably wants to see what happens (for obvious reasons) :D Go the electric guitar. More!

FRICKIN HILARIOUS!
ROFLMAO!
*Can barely comment through lasughter (or speel)*
Bountiful Chests?!?!?!?!?! XD
I feel spunky XD YAY!