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| ladynarutochan 2006-12-29 ch 21,  | abuseHello ! I really like your story The queen past is really interessant and Adam/Teela/Aryanna relationship is good; I wanted to know why didn't you update it ? will you update it one day ? or have you update it on an other website ? |
| Teri 2006-12-25 ch 20, | abuseJust rereading an old favorite and wanted to make sure you had a review in 2006. |
| Teri 2005-05-19 ch 21, anon. | abuseJust wanted to make sure you had a review in 2005. I was just checking into see if perhaps there had been an update. I'm still hoping. :) Take Care, Teri |
| Teri 2004-04-06 ch 21, | abuseI see by your profile that you are still an active writer. Is there any chance that you intend to finish this story? I have read it many times and always enjoy it it. Nice work! |
| Ms Hobgoblin 2004-02-04 ch 21, | abuseGood fic. Intersting plot, I enjoyed reading it, and found that I could relate to it. I hope you update it soon. Hob x |
| Star Mage1 2003-08-13 ch 21, | abuseAre you going to continue this story? |
| Chase M. Dakota 2003-02-23 ch 21, | abusethis is a great chapter and a great story all around. i would love for you to finish this. does adam tell his father who he really is? |
| phil 2003-01-13 ch 21, anon. | abuseYOu planning on finishing this or not? |
| SlyGriff 2003-01-09 ch 21, | abuseI love it!!! I can't wait till it's finished. I hope you keep up the great work! |
2002-11-24 ch 21, anon. | abusethis is one of the best fics i have ever read |
| Emmett Thompson 2002-09-09 ch 21, anon. | abuseHey preety good. Ive been a fan of the MOU since I could remeber and youve capuered it perfectly. Please keep up the good work! |
| Draggon Wolv 2002-04-13 ch 21, | abuseWhyed you stop there? You should keep going! And yes...i remember when He-man was on television. I'm getting old I think. |
| Sarah D. 2002-03-01 ch 1, anon. | abusePlease, please update this soon!!! This story is incredible and so well written. It's a story the show should have done. (Actually, as much as I love the show, this is better than any ep they ever wrote!) Please, please update soon. |
| Orta 2002-01-03 ch 21, anon. | abuseVery well written! The story doesn't seem to have any central point to it, though. I understand the arguments and misunderstandings between the royal family, but you just seem to wander from scene to scene. Please, don't take this the wrong way. You're a very talented writer. You just need more practice with your transitions, and possibly a more solid central theme. Or, just center more on the main aspect. Aryanna is a nice touch, but she seems like an unnecessary extra in many scenes, and a big distraction to the main story. This could be a lot shorter, and just as good, without so much (as I said) wandering. A little proof reading, or maybe a beta-reader would be good for the small grammar and punctuation mistakes too. But, please, don't stop writing - you have a lot of potential! :) |
| Mystryfann 2001-08-02 ch 20, anon. | abuseGreat story! Please continue. The best I have read in a LONG time. Is there a follow up story in the works? More please. Your work is great! Leaves me wanting more. Gade: A! |