this is sad.
and cute at the same time.

Cool...I liked it a lot

Oh...(stare affectionately at wonderful author) such a nice fic. (hums happily) Aw...

Not bad at all. Great job!

ooh, good.

Oh, excellent! I loved the fact that you created an anecdote from Yuya's childhood, especially her coming up with who would be her prospective husband. I always love your one-shots!

Salute!
The Narrator

Just one minor detail: Yuya calls Nozomu niisama or Nozomu-niisama. (My apology for being nitpicky like this. I know this had cost me at least a potential friend once -_-)
Other than that, both Yuya and Nozomu are in-character and well-written. Good job!
(Actually I don't really like praising after criticizing like this. It somehow feels like hitting someone, then telling them they've done a good job evading my punch)

You know Alyson, this *BEGS* for a continuation. This is perfect, and exactly the way I envisioned the Yuya/Nozomu relationship to be. And it was so cute when she said she wanted to marry someone like her brother (and especially knowing that Kyo is SO FAR OFF THE MARK that makes it especially funny at the same time) What else shall I say? Throw myself upon your awesomeness? Your incredible talent? Your excellent insight into the characters? I WORSHIP THEE. But then again, I think you already know that ;)

Bene, bene! Very good!

Very sweet...

^_^

Rin-chan

This is a creative piece that would fit very nicely within the manga. You've really captured a nice sibling essence here and even interweaved a little humor ("a mental image of my brother lying prone on the road while i ran all over him..." LOL).

Ah, wonderful POV and response to the challenge! It seems like something that could of come right outta the manga. Very nice, i enjoyed it alot.

-fox

“No, Yuya, I can’t predict the future,” he answered with a strange, faraway smile. “I can only see the past.”

dont know why, but i absolutely LOVE that line. it was a pleasure to read!

You are a good writer. Your way with Yuya si very good and I think your right about her brother. Please write a other story soon.

what narrator challenge?

Anyway, it was ok. Too bad there's nothing about Kyo's reaction. I've only seen the anime and its kinda strange that right at the end, it seemed like the issue of Yuya's brother was long forgotten even to Yuya so when Sakuya opened up the topic and told Yuya the truth, Yuya was all like "oh, alrighty."