I know that feeling of not being able to get rid of an idea until you write it. Only difference is that mine are usually terrible. XD Yours are definitely not terrible. I'm glad you shared this.

Fantastic. My heart hurts a little for Irvine as I think of him trying to do his job. *pets him.*

I know that "won't go away till you write it" feeling!

Wow, no wonder it bugged you, this poem is excellent! I love it.

excellent poem. i think that it did the "irvine freezing because he doesn't wanna kill the closest thing to a mother he has" moment justice. nice poem. i like the last line...very good poem.

A great poem, so insightful. Just wonderful!

Hey guess who!

I like the poem and I looked up some pics. You are right, he is pretty...

This is a really good story!

omg.. i loved this! this was one of the best poems ever! LOL

::hugs you and give you candy::

thanks for the review too! it was sho sweet! (yes, unfortunally im only 13 XD)

great story and loved it!

Ooh! "Oh!" I said when I first saw the title and read the summary, but "Ooh!" followed when it started.

And "Ooh.." once more at the last line. Oh.. I should continue my story on this too.. *looks sheepish* I actually do have part of it done, just never uploaded cause won't allow the format I demand, eh.. _;; *is silly about things like that*

I really do like this one, though :D That and it rhymes and has a fitting meter and everything. Even more cool! Loved the 'your momma won't be proud' sentence, hehe..

And the last three are just killer, if you'll pardon the expression ;)

I think it's really, really good. I like it.

This was beautifully written _ I love how you brought out his feelings in this. As I read, I coould picture what he was thinking. Great Job :)

Very well written. I don't usually read or write poetry (I'm just not very good at it) but yours was beautiful. The last few lines sum it up the best.

Hey! We must be royalty! (Lady -blank- is what I mean) Anyways, I must admit your penname was what first attracted me to your story. I like it a lot! I especially like that it rhymed. My poems never rhyme. But that's okay. Ya know, you should totally keep writing. I would love to read more of your works, 'kay?

until THE END,

Lady Pyrefly

wow, i liked it. for one thing, it was consistent, which is one thing that is missing from a lot of poems on here. also it was realistic. well done