I'm so glad I could help you.

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Just let me know when you post more stories up.

lol.

Hey! Thanks for giving us a heads up on your chappie. I'm sure we have no problem waitng now. lol. I hope you did well on your tests and paper. Highschooler are you? Ditto here. I'm not taking college classes though. I'm not stupid but I don't do alot of my school work as it is. lol. Oh, I should totally go type my story... I'll do that after I get finished buying my curly pigtails from Gaia. much love and can't wait to read your next chappie!

Hm, interesting chapter, it could use some length though, and you might consider revising the summary, I might not have read this if I hadn't been interested.

I changed my name since I was on last. I was known as darkdemongoddess. I preferred this one instead. I could care less how good or terrible Light Seer's stories are. She was rude to Our BlessedDemon. I absolutely love this story. Please continue.

I am a big fan of this fanfic, though I want to review to every chapter and tell what I feel about it... I find it easier to read the whole thing and then comment on it. lol. Let me ask you something B.D., did and do you enjoy writing this story? If yes, that's all you need to have to continue writing your lovely story. If no, then on your own will you can stop this story. Don't let a few bad reviews get you down.

Light Seer did have some heart in saying that you should write because it satisfies you and you highly enjoy it. I'm one of those people who highly enjoy it and let my writing come from my heart, past experiences, and the support of my family and friends. Although the story currently under my name highly sucks I enjoyed making... starting it. lol. It was started, like, 4 years ago. I posted it, like, last summer. I hope to continue it this summer vacation.

Like most, my story hasn't gotten many reviews at all but that's not what keeps me from continuing on with the story. In fact, it's the busy life of being a high school student having to deal with a father who hates my hobbies, habits, and dream of becoming a writer.

"Writing about an anime takes some knowledge of the Japanese culture and society in general, and a lot of things are objective to reality."

-first off, you don't need to know the culture to write a FANFICTIONAL STORY. It's called fanfictional for a reason.

-Second, the murder flashback, Light says it's unrealistic. Yeah? So what? Who here cares if there is a reason behind the murder? Certainly not me. Mainly because I start to think. 'What is the reason? Will the reason pop up later in the story?' But then again many many people die for no reason. Maybe the murder wasn't plotted out for a reason. Maybe it was random. Like a drive-by shooting.

"they would never be able to say her name right because the Japanese have a soft 'r' sound and no 'l' sound, so her name would be said like "Rena". She wouldn't even be able to say her own name unless she had been bilingual."

-again, who cares. In a fanfic, the writer can do anything he or she wants. And how would anyone know that that is what she wanted the name to come out in Japanese? Do you have the capability to read her thoughts? I think not.

"The fight scene could have been better for the first chapter. For one, when someone is punched they generally feel pain. Even Yusuke winces when Keiko hits him, so when someone is punched there is a reaction that puts them as a disadvantage and weakens their movement. It shows on all sides of the playing field, not just the opponent's side."

-first rule of anime: girls hit harder than the enemies. It's a true fact of life. well... in this case anime. lol. Maybe she's no good at writing fight scenes. Ever thought of that?

-the YYH crew being OOC? Is it just me or does that happen ALOT? Yeah, it does. Many fanfic writers write the main crew out of character. It's either done accidentally or purposefully to make it easier on the writer. I know I do that, though I do try to keep them in character.

I say you continue this story TheBlessedDemon It is a good one and I enjoy reading it over. It's on MY favorite's list. So I say SCREW everyone else and please continue. I am suporting you on this. You should ignore them and continue with this story. It is one of the best one I've read...and that's a lot. So please do.

Hi, i am Rayoko and a fellow auther on Fan Fiction. Your story is very intreging and i wish for you to continue this exiting tail. I normaly don't say more then what i think nessisery, and i would much aprechiate it if you continued one of the few story's that completly demands my attention. I wish for you to continue in this story and plez up date soon. KEEP UP THE GRAND AND FANTASTIC WORK PLEZ!

Rayoko :3

P.S.

my spellig sucks so just bare with me k later :)

PLEASE DONT STOP THE STORY! I haven't spent my time reading this very very very very GOOD story just to have it ended with a cliffhanger! If you stop it i'll never forgive you ! ... OK... Im good now, anyways, please please continue! I'll be your best friend!

Ja Ne .!

Just because I didn't get down on all fours and praise you doesn't mean I'm a sudden jackass. Please, next time you intend to insult me read all of what I have written because it is quite plain to see that you have not as at the end I did say please continue writing, as you are good at it.

Although, it was this particular work that I did not like. I was sharing my opinion as I am free to do, additionally I offered you a suggestion to what you could do in the future, please familiarize yourself with the word "suggestion". I have no intention of making an enemy, and weather you like my advice and follow it or not is up to you, but do not blame anything on me or throw insults at me when I gave you none and treated you politely.

Contrary, I do not find myself as an elite writer, my element is role-playing which I am not the best at either. Although, if you wish to become better than you are than take suggestions into consideration and broaden your mind's horizons. If you wish to keep at your same level, then do not listen and be done with it.

I did suck very much myself in the beginning, but through advice I believe I am better than I had been before, and like your character, I admit I had a horrible Mary Sue in my first fanfictions like many, many other authors. But, little things help you advance easily. You look much more professional with well-constructed sentences which is likely to bring more readers, as well as adding style and plot to stories to draw people in.

If you do not believe me, I can give you an example of my first fanfiction and you can point and laugh and tell me how much it sucks and how all of the characters are out of character (how I wish I could burn that piece of shit I wrote a while ago), then read something I did recently and I can prove to you that I have improved.

Additionally, your confidence as a writer should not come from praise of others. It should come from the satisfaction that you tried your best. If something goes wrong, you can avoid that in the future and rise even higher, so your work will only improve as you continue.

And this part is for darkdemongoddess. Please get my gender right next time.. if you passed by my profile, what little information I have I do state that I am female. If you wish to insult my ability as a writer, read some first, then will I take what you say into notation.

TheBlessedDemon,

i knnow how you feel. i had like 4 or 5 people review me telling me that my fic was terrible and i had so many grammar mistakes. well, i didn't. i looked a million times. i made a 2nd chapter tellin them to fuck off. _;;

but when i read those reviews, i cried so hard. and i was os pissed. i kept thinkin to my self, 'i should just die'. oh, my lil'bro is watchin' "Day Before Christmas". a great movie.

NE who, don't let Light Seer get to you. i read wut s/he wrote and told him to go fuck off too. i don't like it when people lecture me or any of my friends about this and that just 'cuz it doesn't sound realistic or you have to know certian cultures and shit in order ot make a story.

i'm sorry that it got you so upset. i and many of my friends would love it if you would continue this story. no one cold have made it any better than you. and you know what, i'm totally not sayin' it just to cheer yo up. it's completely true.

if you want to get back to me, e-mail me. it's on my page.

Plz go on with the story. I can't think of anything else that might happen now that i read this far. I rely wanna know what would happen! Plz update it soon T.T

I remember this story. I was wondering why it was deleted. h wellz. I luv how u revised the chaps and stuffz

Hey don't be sad! here have a cookie! *gives out cookie* And you shouldn't listen to what other people say because it's just their opinions! Do whatever you like and if no one likes it, it's their problem! Your story is great! yes in my opinion there are mitakes but overall I don't think it's a bad story. And besides, you have to have mistakes or else you won't be that interesting anymore! Just think of it as a learning experience. When I started writing fics I didn't do well either. My fics got deleted so I'm not writing anymore. Let's just say I'm doing my very own strike. LOL update alright? I can't wait to see what happens next

...I don't really get 'Reviews', but I like the story...it's really good...

If you even try to delete this fic I will personally find where you live and smack you upside the head. This is a great fic. One of the best on fact. Sure, everyone needs a little work on grammer and spelling, and of course your going to have a few typos, but who doesn't. Also, you said yourself that this was your favorate fic, don't think about what bitches like "Light Seer" think and just write for the heck of writing. Who ever this "Light Seer" person is should just feel really ashamed of themselves for even making you feel bad. It's people like her (I'm guessing Light Seer is a girl) that just hit people down to make themselves feel better and would end up doing an even worse job. It's a sad truth, but there are a lot of people out there that are like that, you just have to ignore what they say and do what you feel is right. I really love your fic so Plz update soon.

Ja ne

I have a few suggestions for you in the future. Writing about an anime takes some knowledge of the Japanese culture and society in general, and a lot of things are objective to reality.

For one thing, the murder flashback. With no motive behind the killer of her parents the scenario is unrealistic. It does happen in real life on rare occasions, and there is always a reason behind it weather it be revenge or some kind of disorder. Additionally, the fact that you stated that he had a samurai sword would indicate that he comes from a high class in society if he dresses as a samurai and is a highly honorable character and would not kill random people or he would suffer severe consequences. Additionally, there is no reason why the girl, Lena, was not killed as well so the fact that she didn't die in that situation is unrealistic because no where will a five year old stand a chance against a full grown man with a sword. Another problem that arises with that situation is that should she had been an orphan, she would have been sent to some sort of orphanage once investigated should she had been living in the ningenkai, or should she had been living in an unpopulated area or Makai she would not have moved.

Second, daily life style for Japanese. In Japan, all schools have uniforms. Also, they would never be able to say her name right because the Japanese have a soft 'r' sound and no 'l' sound, so her name would be said like "Rena". She wouldn't even be able to say her own name unless she had been bilingual.

The fight scene could have been better for the first chapter. For one, when someone is punched they generally feel pain. Even Yusuke winces when Keiko hits him, so when someone is punched there is a reaction that puts them as a disadvantage and weakens their movement. It shows on all sides of the playing field, not just the opponent's side.

The characters from the cast are very out of character. Since when did Hiei become like Kuwabara? Honestly, if he saw someone fighting on the street ten on one he wouldn't give a damn and just walk away. If he did, he would just hit one of them and leave without a word because he is not the speech type so much as the others are. Lena's reactions seem inconsistant, as suddenly she is ready to pick fights with anyone which would put her at antagonist status and if they were to save someone why would it be her and not the people she were fighting? Additionaly for meeting people, Kuwabara is in love with Yukina only so he would never, ever hit on another girl no matter how pretty she may be because he loves Yukina and would see her as prettier anyway. Hiei would never be caught dead in a highschool or else he would be attending one, and Kuwabara Yusuke and Kurama have no reason to attend other schools than the schools they already attend. Additionally, Kurama goes by his human name in the ningenkai and would never be called Kurama by a stranger.

After pointing out those things, I would simply suggest making more realistic scenarios. Aboslutely do not be discouraged from writing, but work on your weaknesses on realism. Well, as far as real can go within a series. Other than the lack of realism, the story was very nice.