Overal there's a cheeky tone to this dark chapter of the sonic timeline - from Eggman's eye-spy games, to the clueless secretary and (of course) the rippin' musical numbers, you certainly take a lighter approach to the story.

The first chapter is definetly your best, and each successive post weakens by relying more and more on the game script and dialogue, to where chapter four races like Sonic to complete the story with minimal additions. (I really would have liked to know how and why the villains "threats fell on deaf ears".)

It's a treat whenever you add something fresh, like the SonicvsMetal fights, the extended BoomBoo battle, info on the chaos emeralds or a neat cameo. You devote a bit more time and love to really develop these new bits.

Absolutely loved the appearance of Chaos - you hit his character conflict perfectly with that lingering whisper of desire to take the emeralds and go mad with power.

Your style of adaptation has shown some great improvement since "More than a Metal Frame" - you're complimenting the story with fresh ideas and background info (ie GUN copying Eggman's designs), playing around with dialogue and generally bringing your own interpretation to the script.
That said, I'm disappointed that you stole GreenGibbon!'s SA2 prologue from the Green Hill Zone database. You didn't even -try- to paraphrase or rewrite it. People get expelled from university for this kind of plagiarism.
Dump the prologue, write your own, or at least acknowledge in a preface that you've taken this material from another author. (with links to his site).

I've added this fic to my new C2 community, a place for all fics that are adaptations of official stories.

If you disprove just send me an e-mail or make a review on any of my fics.

A great chapter!

Look, this is my story and I can put in my own parts. And if you don't like well tough! If I just do the normal storyline, it will not be interesting to read.

Metal Sonic, Chaos, Tikal, Big, and a rock concert?! That wasn't in the game...

Another excellent chapter! Some nice twists to the plot. I love the extra dialouge (especially the shuttle launch scene). Why would Robotnik (Eggman) want a song sung by his mechanical robots? Tikal added in and I know Big can be seen in the Dreamcast version of the game.

Some interesting ideas there.

Maria's disease
GUN looking for immortality
The Emeralds having their own special powers
And including Metal Sonic

all give a unique twist to your story.

There are a couple of things wrong.

First Shadow recalls Maria saying "Give them a chance", which is what Amy says to Shadow to remind him of the full wish. It's because he can't remember the full wish that he thinks she wanted revenge and not peace.

While lines are not all that important, the first line of the helicopter scene should be Sigma Alpha 2. If you look more closely the initials there are SA2 or Sonic Adventure 2.

Check out my own Sonic Adventure 2: A Shadow's memory, which I did for Sonic's 12th birthday.

Eggman playing eye-spy; that's so childish. I would have thought that you would have more of a battle between Tails and Eggman. I find it impossible for Sonic to travel at 900 mph without the power of the Chaos Emeralds. The way you put it seems impossible for Sonic to reach that rate of speed without another source to give him a boost in power. Why don't you italicize some of the words to give a more infacise on that word. I think you should give more discriptions of the character's actions in your fanfic. Try not to post too many in one day since that shows that you have too much time on your hands, but try to post at least once a day so that you can get reviews on all of your chapters. Keep going!

Not bad at all. You seem to really know now the game goes and I don't see many SA2 fanfics here. If Sonic is traveling over 700 mph; he has surpassed the speed of sound which is I think around 500 or 600 mph. I don't mind if you call Robotnik 'Eggman,' but I'd prefer if he was called 'Eggman' as an insult by Sonic and not actually call him that himself. Sonic breaking into song? Why not add more action as he is singing the song so that it looks more interesting than having him run in just a straight line. I loved the sarcastic remarks by Sonic towards GUN. Added Metal Sonic? That is a nice twist. When Sonic says something is boring; he says it like it is two syllables 'bor-ring' (That's the way I perseve it). Looking for more!