Woah... that's good! Lol! I'm really, really impressed with this, especially the idea of Nagini being the gift of the demon! Brilliant work, I can see why you like it!

One aspect which I really enjoy about your stories is your use of language - I read in your profile that you are studying old languages, but I like the way you utilise them in your stories. I would love to know where you got all the demon names and the incantations from. I also like the way you allude to the old Roman in the names you chose for your characters - very in-keeping with Rowling, and I like the idea that maybe one of Snape's ancestors on his father's side was a wizard after all.

Great story, which I feel privileged to have read. I love the character of Tom, and you really do him justice here. Thanks. :-)

-Kat.

I liked it, it was very interesting. I got a little confused, but it was still good. The demon is very interesting. I know i must sound like a dunce but how did the circle break?

nice and scary. the demon is particularly well-written.
you're really good with details, eg description of alexander, and i really like how you bring in nagini as tom's faithful 'pet'. it's almost sweet how she hisses happily when he strokes her. it also makes tom feel more human, and therefore even scarier.
i hope you keep writing on this one.

goldie

ps: i am writing going to write an essay at uni about anonymous amateur authorship on the internet. would you like to do an interview with me? if not that's all right, if yes that would be great - just let me know if you are interested.