Reviews for And Then There Was One

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SU2freako 2008-07-07 ch 57,	abuseAHH!♥IT! UPDATE SOON!
Drakkenfyre 2008-06-09 ch 57,	abuseHey Canadian, want to make a deal? I don't know if you're still around. I mean, you could be dead or something could have happened so that you can't write anymore. But if you are alive, and are able to write, how about this: You finish your story and I'll finish mine. Deal?
Drakkenfyre 2008-06-07 ch 41,	abuseHe he, your Canadian is showing. Three of those stores exist in Canada, but not in the US. Besides, after Laura Secord gave that intel to Lieutenant (pronounced lef-ten-ant by you and I) FitzGibbon, would Americans buy chocolates from a chocolate shop after her? I think they might still be a little angry about that war, over things like the Burning of Washington--however, I will point out that a little White House and a shipyard hardly pays back them burning York and our parliament buildings. ;) I won't tell you the other two, but you'll be able to figure them out. And since I'm being nit-picky, it's CVS Pharmacies, not CVC, and it's "stomach," not "stomache." But I make mistakes like these all the time, so I'm not judging, just pointing out. Okay, enough nit-picking; on to the good points. :) First, let me reiterate strongly that this is one of the best pieces of fanfiction I have ever read. Darn, it's a fabulous piece of fiction, period. The flashback was absolutely perfect. It was in the right place and it perfectly brought our emotions right back into the story. And it was so fricking sad! Also, I was happy to see yet another POV. I think you nailed the Brass-Warrick emotional entanglement over Holly Gribbs. You also write flirtation very well. Whew! Did someone turn up the heat in here? And the fabric bit about the thong? I laughed out loud, probably to the chagrin of those sleeping here. And why are there people sleeping here? Because your story--your novel--is just so good that I just want to read one . . . more . . . chapter before I go to bed. :D
Drakkenfyre 2008-06-05 ch 38,	abuseThis chapter is just full of really excellent writing. It was like reading a mystery novel, only it was better than a lot that I've read.
Drakkenfyre 2008-06-01 ch 29,	abuseWow, what a beautiful chapter. Especially the last narrative bit, the last four paragraphs.
Drakkenfyre 2008-05-29 ch 23,	abuseROFL, I loved the meta fan fiction bit! :D
Drakkenfyre 2008-05-29 ch 20,	abuseYour second paragraph was just priceless. I very much enjoyed reading it. And it was a perfect start to a great chapter. Excellent use of strict first-person POV. And it was perfect how you introduced Sara's mother's words, then brought her back to them at the end. This was beautifully written.
Drakkenfyre 2008-05-29 ch 13,	abuseHm . . . not all reporters are bad, you know. Some of the most moral people I've known have been reporters, because they actually have to examine their ethical choices on a daily basis.
Drakkenfyre 2008-05-29 ch 19,	abuseHm, given that we've never seen Sara be this unprofessional and juvenile in the series, it's really pulling me out of the story again. I suppose it was useful for where you want your story to go, but I think you went too far. You are a great writer, and I'm sure I wouldn't be having this reaction if this was original fiction and not fan fiction.
Drakkenfyre 2008-05-29 ch 12,	abuseMore wonderful developments. And I really liked the interaction with Sara in this chapter. Well done.
Drakkenfyre 2008-05-29 ch 11,	abuseI loved the Greg characterization in this chapter. I think you totally get him, and have developed him in a totally believable way. And I really like how you're setting things up with Brass. Intriguing! Also, my review that has two stars in it seems to have triggered the bad words filter. How? I had the word "hard" next to the word "on." But not in the fun way. :)
Drakkenfyre 2008-05-27 ch 9,	abuseI'm enjoying this story, but I think you were way too ** Sara in this chapter, to the point of being out of character. It made it difficult and unpleasant for me to finish reading this chapter.
Drakkenfyre 2008-05-27 ch 8,	abuseThis is a great story so far. I'm loving the POV character's observations of the CSIs. Very well done. :)
Zarf 2008-01-19 ch 57, anon.	abuse... I don't suppose I can beg or bribe you to finish this amazingly wonderful story...? -Zarf
JDM81 2006-07-14 ch 1, anon.	abuseI've been following this fantastic fic since the first post but never left a review until now. I'm awfully disappointed there hasn't been an update in a long time. I see so many of these fics left undone so I hope you haven't abandoned us. Please, update.

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